Monday, March 09, 2009

twister








tingling tongue
tantalised by
TANGY ORANGE-
now traumatised
the tongue
tingles

Also go join the NaisaiKu Challenge.

16 comments:

anthonynorth said...

I can feel the thirst.

Susan Helene Gottfried said...

My brain is tingling, too!

Fledgling Poet said...

My tongue tingled when I read this out loud...good one!

Lorraine said...

Fantastic flow and so sweet lol you have a way with words ;)

Julia Smith said...

Tantalised and traumatised - even our taste buds live dramatic lives.

Linda Jacobs said...

I like how you changed the repetitions to keep it fresh!

Magyar said...

walking
through the forest
rain
MY FEET ARE WET
through
the forest rain
walking

The T's ToTaly Tangled.

Interesting! _m

Tumblewords: said...

I like the tantalising tingles - it's so vivid, it sparkles.

Stan Ski said...

The 'T's make this work so well!

littlekhargosh said...

i like this :)
tingles when seduced. tingles when traumatized.

totomai said...

satisfied thirsts. loved the t sounds

Whitesnake said...

terribly teffic tongue twisting tone!

mahesh said...

twister....u have seen the movie!!!!!!








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sweet talking guy said...

Tingling tongue twister! Love it Gautami!

Third attempt at posting....

theaccidentalnovelist said...

making my rounds late on the train... still haven't tried the naisaiKu. sounds like fun.

tingling in vancouver...

firebird said...

I love tongue twisters-- this one is special for its effect on the tongue even by reading it silently! Very, very clever, as your poems always are--love this one.