Sunday, November 27, 2011

fulcrum of my thoughts

anger spinning out of control
I lash out at you
my face so ruddy
your smug smile incenses me

I find that untidy envelope
gullible words rustle in my ear
I shudder in a subliminal way
but sunshine mellows me

you, the fulcrum of my thoughts,
make anger rush out.
come, let me hold you close,
let me exist in a fool's paradise.

25 comments:

brenda w said...

Gorgeous write, Gautami. I've been there, love the words here.

Laura Maria said...

Great take on the prompt! I love this and can totally relate!!

Cheryl said...

This is so very lovely.

anthonynorth said...

So many will relate to this.

Morning said...

This one is brilliant.

Other Mary said...

I like your metaphors. In particular I like the lines, 'I find that untidy envelope/ gullible words rustle in my ear'

Celestial Dreamz said...

a brilliant write ...

The Write Girl said...

This made me smile. Enjoyed the ride of these thoughts. Nice poem.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Wow, the surprising turnaround took me by surprise. Love the last line. "Been there, done that, Got the t-shirt!" :-)

rch said...

very evocative of past relationships gone bad but what is life without a little illusion?

:-Dee said...

Love the choice of words. Enjoyed it. :)

Old Raven said...

You have created a richness of emotion.

Abin Chakraborty said...

very well written indeed.we all connect with the emotions in our own ways.

Laurie Kolp said...

Awesome poem... I really like the ending.

Mama Zen said...

Outstanding write!

Jinksy said...

Hm... fool's paradise is not a good place to visit, eh?

Fireblossom said...

Those smug smiles set me off, too!

lynnaima said...

what a bittersweet proposition!!!:(
my entry: http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/10/28/ratatouille/

Amity said...

Wonderful!

Really a fool's paradise...:D

Ella said...

oooh, I love this, the last line sums it all up! ah, yes the Fool's paradise...we all end up visiting that place! Remarkable~

Marianne said...

Spectacular use of the wordle words! I really struggled with this one.

Ramesh Sood said...

A beautiful poem.. loved it..

Mike Patrick said...

I really like this one, Gautami. One of the smoother uses of those difficult words that I’ve seen. You brought them all together beautifully.

Mystic_Mom said...

Wonderfully done!

The Gooseberry Garden said...

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