Poetry for me is a way of living, it comes out of nowhere and I have to write it down. How I write, what I write, I decide. I am not asking you to be judgemental. I am gifted with the ability to see beyond the obvious.
Sunday, November 20, 2011
oblivion
drowned in spark, oblivious of silence; trapped in smolder of mindless fire sky rains diamonds
which fleetingly show their face and fly away to another planet
"drowned", "oblivious", "trapped". . . then that opening out to "fly away to another planet": effects of being lost to love. Nice tie-in of "spark" with "diamonds".
awesome, what a fantastic way of using the words, gautami. mine is nothing compared to this. i couldn't even include all of them. thank you for visiting mine and leaving me a wonderful comment.
33 comments:
magical mystical write...all surround a moment of beautiful love...
Passion and fire behind this 160. Thanks for playing.
I like the idea of this couple being "...drowned in spark..."
sweet.
Happy Sunday.
sweet.
Happy Sunday.
"drowned", "oblivious", "trapped". . . then that opening out to "fly away to another planet": effects of being lost to love. Nice tie-in of "spark" with "diamonds".
magical indeed! love it!
JJRod'z
I love "trapped in smolder"...
This is fabulous. I love the picture, and the movie where it originated. Great work here.
Ah, love, beautiful.
Yes, the universse has it! Nicely penned.
Love "sky rains diamonds."
super! near and far- for sure- inner and outer space simultaneously!thanks.
the sparks fly...lovely
Passionate piece, Gautami.
Pamela
My, this is a compact piece!
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Nice. I'm feeling some sparks myself!
=)
you really capture the obsession that is love and lust
"sky rains diamonds"...this is beautiful Gautami!!
That's some spark...
Neat pairing of the two prompts. You really give the best to both of them. "Trapped in smolder" is my favorite
Stunning image in this, Gautami!
Drowned in spark - an emotive piece!
Delightful use of words to create the scene of passion. Love it!
A moment of perfect love..raining diamonds..such passion!!
I love this! "Trapped in smolder
of mindless fire" is an awesome line!
Might be nice to fly away to another planet. Goodness knows we're making enough mess of this one.
Lovely prose and great use of the prompt words :)
What a passionate piece! Couldn't be more different from mine!
awesome, what a fantastic way of using the words, gautami. mine is nothing compared to this. i couldn't even include all of them. thank you for visiting mine and leaving me a wonderful comment.
Love’s oblivion: found in ecstasy—lost in tragedy. Such fragile steel from emotions wrought.
I love your poem. It's sparkly and diamond encrusted.
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ooooooh! i like it!!!!
very passionate
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