Sunday, November 20, 2011

oblivion



drowned in spark,
oblivious of silence;
trapped in smolder
of mindless fire
sky rains diamonds

which fleetingly show their face
and fly away to another planet

33 comments:

Brian Miller said...

magical mystical write...all surround a moment of beautiful love...

Monkey Man said...

Passion and fire behind this 160. Thanks for playing.

Martin said...

I like the idea of this couple being "...drowned in spark..."

Morning said...

sweet.

Happy Sunday.

Morning said...

sweet.

Happy Sunday.

Maureen said...

"drowned", "oblivious", "trapped". . . then that opening out to "fly away to another planet": effects of being lost to love. Nice tie-in of "spark" with "diamonds".

JJ Roa Rodriguez said...

magical indeed! love it!

JJRod'z

Tess Kincaid said...

I love "trapped in smolder"...

brenda w said...

This is fabulous. I love the picture, and the movie where it originated. Great work here.

C Hummel Kornell a/k/a C Hummel Wilson said...

Ah, love, beautiful.

Adura Ojo said...

Yes, the universse has it! Nicely penned.

Bone said...

Love "sky rains diamonds."

izzy said...

super! near and far- for sure- inner and outer space simultaneously!thanks.

JANU said...

the sparks fly...lovely

flaubert said...

Passionate piece, Gautami.

Pamela

Magical Mystical Teacher said...

My, this is a compact piece!

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Sue said...

Nice. I'm feeling some sparks myself!

=)

zenmirror said...

you really capture the obsession that is love and lust

Carrie Burtt said...

"sky rains diamonds"...this is beautiful Gautami!!

Cad said...

That's some spark...

barbara said...

Neat pairing of the two prompts. You really give the best to both of them. "Trapped in smolder" is my favorite

Victoria said...

Stunning image in this, Gautami!

Tumblewords: said...

Drowned in spark - an emotive piece!

Kay said...

Delightful use of words to create the scene of passion. Love it!

Lyn said...

A moment of perfect love..raining diamonds..such passion!!

Marianne said...

I love this! "Trapped in smolder
of mindless fire" is an awesome line!

Daydreamertoo said...

Might be nice to fly away to another planet. Goodness knows we're making enough mess of this one.
Lovely prose and great use of the prompt words :)

keiths ramblings said...

What a passionate piece! Couldn't be more different from mine!

Olive Tree said...

awesome, what a fantastic way of using the words, gautami. mine is nothing compared to this. i couldn't even include all of them. thank you for visiting mine and leaving me a wonderful comment.

Mike Patrick said...

Love’s oblivion: found in ecstasy—lost in tragedy. Such fragile steel from emotions wrought.

Cheryl said...

I love your poem. It's sparkly and diamond encrusted.

http://mysticmissive.blogspot.com

Leonora Sophie said...

ooooooh! i like it!!!!

zongrik said...

very passionate