Monday, January 09, 2012

chequered windows


thousands of aeon have passed
I grope the air
thatched huts are just beyond that gate
forgotten splotchy hearth reminds me of
my fluttering heart in a rain laden day
a flash of iridescent stones blinds me
I run out of the gate
breathing into cold air
he watches me from above
I detest that condescending look on his face

"rebuild my a pedestal, I will look down upon you"

16 comments:

brenda w said...

Strong writing, I can't stop reading it.


the fluttering

zongrik said...

do you really think it's condescending? i think it's just supposed to be serious leadership.

days of cohan

Traci B said...

Terrific combination of the wordle with the photo prompt. Your poem can stand without the image, but the photo does lend context to the ending lines. I don't know if I'd call it condescending, but Yul Brynner definitely looks pretty stern and intimidating in that poster.

Marbles in My Pocket said...

Very good write with a good message, too!
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Taylor Boomer said...

smiles,

smart words, wow.

flaubert said...

Powerful write, Gautami.

Pamela

Laurie Kolp said...

Enjoyed this... especially:

splotchy hearth reminds me of my fluttering heart in a rain laden day a flash of iridescent stones

Brian Miller said...

nice...strong verse....condescending is not a good look to feel...

Victoria said...

sad poem of flight - hard to flee a condescentding attitued in the best of times

Natasha Head said...

amazing pen! I certainly would not want the faces in your image looking down on me. Fantastic write!

Shauna said...

I picture a beautiful young horse,
who finally finds a way to get out
of captivity.

Tumblewords: said...

Very fine!

meirozavian said...

Interesting piece, powerful.
Best wishes

sara McNulty said...

Wonderful imagery in this. I have read it several times. Love the photo!

Jack said...

Gautami,

Read all pending poems. I think I need to visit more often as when I read so many together it is not easy to decide which touched me more.

Take care

Judy Roney said...

"my fluttering heart in a rain laden day" brings about a brilliant feel, sound, and vision.