I put the final stitches to that patch
yarn was coming apart
my plum sweater was a gift from the past
the letters had stopped coming
I had not expected the drift
I shovelled that sense of loss
and let the wind stop my thoughts
shouldn't I have spun a tale for friends
change the old to new?
"an image that forms behind the eyes
how do I explain dancing words?"
how do I explain dancing words?"
26 comments:
A wonderful write!
Anna :o]
This flowed fast a furiously. It reads like it came to you quickly from a muse with something to say. Excellent write!
i liked how you linked this to the old/new theme going around for new year
Great poem, gautami. You express so many emotions and desires in so few lines.
No, some secrets of the past should be held tight within you. I love to imagine those dancing words behind your eyes, but don't tell me their secret.
Regrets, I've had a few...
Emotive writing. Thank you.
The tale should be spun, I think, only if the friends are willing to sit still long enough to listen...
A Whirl of Haiku
Excellent. I enjoy concise verse like this that gives just the hints of a story. Happy New Year.
This is beautiful. I especially love the turn it takes in the final lines. Nicely written.
Very concise and wonderful!
Beautifully written ! Liked the touch of nostaliga...
Words in your writings are freely dancing. Always a pleasure to watch that dance.
no need to explain even if you can.
I always come here to enjoy what yu write.. and it always leaves me awe strcuk.. Thanks Gautami..for each treat..A very Happy New Year to You and yours..
nice write here! great flow, nice seeing it up at Real Toads
I loved the way you shoveled that sense of lost. It expresses it very well.
A very distinct style uve got!
Lovely. Keep sharing!
Happy new year! :)
I love the imagery in your writing!
So well done.
wow, nice, like a whirlwind. or an unraveling sweater. happy new year!
Beautifully done!
All the best to you for 2012.
Kay, Alberta, Canada
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Wonderful write!
http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/12/31/one-day-at-a-time/
yeah, i feel this exactly...brilliant write :)
I like it. The words danced.
Glad for what you did,
Happy New Year.
Loved reading this poem. Thank you for sharing
Hello.
I enjoyed reading this. Especially liked the last couple of stanzas.
Nicely done, as usual!
Thanks for sharing.
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