Tuesday, January 31, 2012

opposites

hidden by the fog
I walked blindly
chasing the road as if in a blind alley
sounds of chilly wind chased me
silence of my chilled heart propelled me
I stumbled in the cobbled path
fell down on my knees,
compelled to kiss the frosted earth

when I reached home
I didn't see the light at first
but seeing you sleeping so peacefully
I jumped on our bed
kissed the roof with glee
cool surface drove away my guilt
innocence of your love merged into me

"when you wake up
I will make up
until then I am going to figure out
how to stand upside down"

22 comments:

ayala said...

Love these lines...I jumped on our bed
kissed the roof with glee
cool surface drove away my guilt
innocence of your love merged into me....I can feel the anticipation and the love....

Myrna R. said...

I happened to visit Poets United today. Don't have time to respond to the prompt. But I think you did a wonderful job. I love this poem, and how did you ever find a picture to match so well?

You use lovely words to create clear imagery.

De said...

"until then I am going to figure out
how to stand upside down"

LOVE this line!

barbara said...

Wonderful conclusion.
I really like this take on the image.

Tarang Sinha said...

Nice!:)

Natasha Head said...

I thought this a fantastic play with the image and my favorite lines have already been shared by others. A wonderful write!

Caerlynn said...

Nice poem. My favorite phrase is "chasing the road." I think there's another prompt in that.

vivinfrance said...

great fun.

nan said...

Nice. Love the ending!

flaubert said...

Yes, literally is good, Gautami. I love your take on the pic.

Pamela

Raven's Wing Poetry said...

I like the contrast between kissing the ground and kissing the ceiling, between the chill of wandering alone and the warmth of home.

-Nicole

Ray Sharp said...

a fine poem, very clever and a great ending!

Laurie Kolp said...

Lovely piece... great ending!

http://lkharris-kolp.blogspot.com/2012/02/test-water.html

meiro said...

Nice piece

Brian Miller said...

nice...as with others the end is my fav part...

Christine said...

nice way to conclude the tormenting thoughts of the first part, making up will do that

Elaine said...

This is wonderful. So deep and meaningful with a lovely lighthearted twist at the end.

irene said...

Yes a lovely interpretation indeed.

Margaret said...

Stand upside down? ha Let's hope he wakes up soon...
Very playful poem

Anup Sadi said...

Panoramic poetry, full of scenarios & imagery.

Shauna said...

gorgeous: fear and love, in the
span of one night.

Whitesnake said...

Blood rush too the head........ Not good!