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alighting from the sun
a child walks on the water
wind can't blow her away-
that child lost in the threshold
of life and after-life.
secret passages of the lake
close in. her dad rues
lost opportunity.
sky seeks the child back into its fold
"blobs of light will reflect first, yet take it away"
23 comments:
Beautiful... this must be true...in the realms of unknown..thanks for taking me there Gautami..
leaves gloomy feeling.
'wind can't blow her away'..amidst the sadness the image of this child..now strong..shines through..Jae
Its touching and very intriguing. Lovely!
Dear Guatami: Excellent poem; very thoughtful.
Beautiful image evoked.
So sad and touching.
I think I can see a child there in that light. I found this line: "that child lost in the threshold of life" striking.
So sad, Gautami.
Vivid imagery in this intriguing piece!
very nice Gautami...realy like this
beautiful poem!
sad and touching.
what a story.
you nailed it.
Very simple yet articulate..
What imagery and sentiment in such a short piece. Really, really enjoyed this, thanks for sharing.
I also think the picture lends it self to the words in such an enhancing manner:)
The image does give the illusion of a child's spirit. This is very sad but at the same time serene and beautiful
deep and sorrowful. A good write with emotion.
And death takes the lead. I, too, wrote of death and loss...
http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2011/06/20/bella/
There is a mysterious quality in this one that almost transcends loss. Beautiful.
Emotional and very expressive...
splendid!
Very moving images and words. Excellent Tami. Love it...
Melanie
great flow, vivid imagery. nice ... and sad.
Such poignant imagery.
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