Wednesday, April 16, 2008

green-eyed monster

invisible to naked eyes
virus of jealousy crawls,
snaking into touching distance.
stage has been set up
for the next kill as destruction
has taken away the thrill.
chasing gives a kick
when there is nothing else to pick.

raging green-eyed monster
within the mind of the adversary-
is the best reward one can get

22 comments:

polona said...

jealousy is a dangerous thing unless kept under control...
powerfully written!

Jo Anne O. said...

Your writings are always an insightful and interesting read.

Billy said...

Great piece on jealousy, with strong verbs and imagery!

pjd said...

Jealousy is always a dangerous and cruel motivator.

tumblewords said...

Cool! I like the last stanza's recital of 'living well is the best revenge'. Neat!

niebla said...

I particularly like these lines and their cheeky rhymes:

or the next kill as destruction
has taken away the thrill.
chasing gives a kick
when there is nothing else to pick.

An interpretation

Linda Jacobs said...

Yes, jealousy is a virus! Your "poemette" is insightful!

Remiman said...

gautami,
holy smokes girl, I love "virus of jealousy crawls".
That has more than an ounce ot truth in it.
rel

Leigh Lear said...

very powerful.

anthonynorth said...

Indeed, a truth. Beautifully expressed. I'm quite jealous :-)

keith hillman said...

Once again a really interesting read. Jealousy is an evil parasite

Tammy said...

Hi Tami!
Jealousy is a virus that hurts many. Loved your poemett. ;)XXOO

I made header smaller, did it help?

Just someone said...

Thank you for the comments; your work is really great; love to come back here.

nice touch today to the 3WW prompt

Noah the Great said...

This is wonderful.

paisley said...

oooohhh sometimes it ever so much fun to be the evil one... loved it!!!

TC said...

This was a very strong piece, Gautami. The green-eyed monster is a force to be reckoned with.

watermaid said...

A strong piece, tightly written.

lissa said...

I don't read the monster as jealousy but as something that stop us from doing what we want,

quite thought provoking

Amarettogirl said...

Jealousy is a virus and so well written this is! I remember always hearing about the 'ugly green head of jealousy' when I was growing up and here we have the one-eyed green monster! The one eye is so deep since it is a form of funnel vision --- but I agree this can represent so much more than just jealousy!

christine said...

After reading your poem, I saw Jealousy as a green snake, slithering. Very good- you create a menacing tone, and then make it even more pronounced by having the narrator delight in someone else's jealousy. Did I read that correctly?

steerforth said...

For being so short, this poem packs quite a story and leaves room for ample speculation as to what's actually happening there. I would tend to agree with Christine, i.e. "having the narrator delight in someone else's jealousy."

onemorebeliever said...

powerful words on the emotions of jealousy... as outta control as a raging fire..