Friday, April 18, 2008

sleeping beauty----Writers Island



cursed she was by the evil witch
and was made to sleep
for no one knew how many years.
her parents, the king and the queen-
although happy she was not dead,
mourned their daughter's fate.
year by year, they slowly retreated
to other parts of their lives, being
with other children. she was forgotten
sleeping in that bed of hers, weeds growing
around her palace, thick trees covering it-
silence of nights prolonged her agony.

when a lonesome prince lost his way,
finding the palace was his oasis.
slowly climbing the stairs, he saw
the sleeping princess lost to world
when his lips touched hers,
he tasted the great bliss of death.
triumph of the princess was blood
of those who kissed her luscious lips.
under her bed were skeletons
of doomed men lost over the years.

17 comments:

shubd07 said...

Reminded me of Roald Dahl .His stories for children always had twist-in-the-tale endings :)

anthonynorth said...

The dreaded kiss of death. Marvellously done.

Suma said...

trust you to work out something different...nicely done...

suma said...

sorry forgot to leave my url..

Richard said...

Tami, you and Anthony are on the same wavelength. Sex = Death. Funny. Say, you've got really good handle on the rhythm in this one - well done.

Lucy said...

Your endings always surprise me, for a sweet girl you can write some evil stuff! haha :))

Tammy said...

Great take on the old fairy tale Tami! That was some kiss. ;)

keith hillman said...

What a dark and atmospheric piece. Entertaining as ever!

jadey said...

Interesting post and quite a change. Well done.

Fenny said...

Sleeping Beauty with a vampire's kiss ... very interesting twist

black coffee said...

thats was a dark twist!
i had suck sympathies for the princess in the first half and then i was aghast!

very well writen. i think it is the ability of the writer to change the reactions of the reader so swiftly that is to be commended here!! :)
loved it!

polona said...

a fairy tale with a different ending.
love it!

Constance said...

This line really got to me... "they slowly retreated to other parts of their lives, being with other children." Sad, but necessary...
Nifty poem.

watermaid said...

When you said that you were re-visiting your childhood, I was expecting something in the personal memoir genre. I have never really left the fairy tales of my childhood behind. I agree that this is more like Roald Dahl than the traditional tale.
Aphrodite

Rambler said...

hmm very nicely done..
to be frank..I kind of felt sad to see a women being a cause for doomed men.

Rob Kistner said...

Whoa... now that brings a whole new meaning to the term -- "killer kisser". Fascinating piece Gautami... ;)

Jeques said...

A quite common plot that end up in a very uncommon way. There are many ways to give fairy tales ending ~ some could end up like this. But for the young ones, I would still prefer their fairy tales to end the traditional
and-they-live-happily-ever-after kind of way.

I wish you well.

~ Jeques