Tuesday, February 24, 2009

crossroads

when at crossroads
stop, pause a while,
fix the dilemma.
BY ASKING WHAT AILS YOU?
dilemma fixed now,
stop pausing
and cross the roads.

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Now go join the NaisaiKu Challenge.

Thanks Andy, I am lovin' writing those!

15 comments:

Wendy Naisa said...

Love the way you did this, it reminds me of:
Summers coming
and she's twenty eight bags
of sugar overweight
THE BEACH CAN'T WAIT
Every day at the gym,
bikini fits now
she can swim

SweetTalkingGuy.. said...

Hi Gautami, a quick fix, perhaps?

Thanks for posting this...
-Andy

Lorraine said...

lo lI totally love this ;)

!nversed Poignancy! said...

lol..
Lovely wordplay there..specially the splitology at the end..
Good one!.

Do try the newer form with the structure reduced to 5 lines..its really more fun..
Thanks to andy again!

Deborah Godin said...

Loved it! There's something inferently playful about this form, I think.

floreta said...

a unique one!!

Susan Helene Gottfried said...

Great advice in here, and another cool form. I admire your discipline in being able to tackle these forms!

Julia Smith said...

Wonderful! I can see where these could get addictive...

Magyar said...

I like this... we often face our own cross-roads.

a moments paws
to look both ways
the cat crosses
_m

Tan said...

WOW, you are mstering the concept here ... I'm sure you are going to write more of these and charm us!!

Kudos ...

Winnie the poohi said...

Ah a new way of doing it! I might try this too :D

Stan Ski said...

Same words, different meaning - I like that.

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

good advice. :)

polona said...

i can tell you're having fun with these. and it shows!

Richard Wells said...

Tami, that was a wonderful dhama buddy kind of poem. well done.