Friday, February 13, 2009

NaisaiKuing: all the way


for basketting the ball
pull on your sports gear
get going ballistics
FOR BASKETTING THE BALL
get going ballistics
pull on your sports gear
for basketting the ball


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loosened elastics
pull down your pants
make you fall flat on ground
LOOSENED ELASTICS
make you fall flat on ground
pull down your pants
loosened elastics


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basket appears far away
the sky feels nearer
you see stars on ground
BASKET APPEARS FAR AWAY
you see stars on ground
the sky feels nearer
basket appears far away


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writing a naisaiKu
is it not mental sports
living out the brute force
WRITING A NAISAIKU
living out the brute force
is it not mental sports
writing a naisaiKu


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29 comments:

Lorraine said...

I am truly flabbergasted, how unusual and daring ;)

anthonynorth said...

I see you've caught the bug. I must have a go.

Sweet Talking Guy.. said...

Hi Gautami, many thanks for rising to the challenge! Love the Loosened elastics!

Margie said...

I'm so impressed with your writing ability!
Good, good work!

Margie

polona said...

oh, this looks like fun!
and you managed to make it into something special

texasblu said...

that is a mental sport, for sure!

Whitesnake said...

Bastards???
Oh ya said Baskets....whoops!

Wendy Naisa said...

Hi Gautami, love the way you took to this form so easily, I'm adding you to the Bloggage on the NaisaiKu.. site!

Linda Jacobs said...

I'm going to have to check that site out. I think my kids would enjoy writing them.

Love yours!

Haiku Tuna said...

By coincidence I tried something new too.
Trust

I think you've now inspired two of us to have a go as well, with your style -- always thoughtful!

venus66 said...

Very impressive!

david santos said...

Fantastic!
Excellent work!!! Congrats.

latree said...

it is like a mirror work. wonderful!

Jeeves said...

Wow!!!I love the third one!!!!

firebird said...

You are so clever! I love the way the four poems interact in a series...
I am always impressed with how you take on new challenges and forms of poetry that require a great deal of discipline.. is that your mathematical training? (Plus inspiration, of course!)

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

interesting way of writing...

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Ofira Sephiroth said...

great series of poems with an interesting subject.

Rex Venom said...

I love what you post. The last one, too! Where does it all come from...?
Are you secretly a creative mad woman?
Rock on!

haikuexpeditions said...

nice indeed. keep it going...

Pretty Me!! said...

loved all of them here !!!!

Tumblewords: said...

Ah, you did well! I haven't tried this yet...

b said...

I wish I even understood how you do this. Fun to read I think.

b

Stan Ski said...

Now it's a sport too! We should have a competition.

present said...

This is very interesting! It looks challenging and fun!

keith said...

This form of writing seems to be getting very popular and yours is a good as it gets! Loved it.

rosey said...

Woo! This is fun. Can you imagine me writing NasalKings? I'm sure I'd get in a terrible muddle.

Cam said...

Very funny. It's very good.

floreta said...

these are fun. it is probably harder than it looks. mental sport indeed!