Wednesday, August 12, 2009

fired blue vase

that pale blue vase
made with expertise
captured her essence
when I held it in my hands
I missed her terribly

last masterpiece of his
helped me break his head
that vase qualifying as a weapon
was only a fitting tribute
for all she had suffered

jinxed it might have been for him
when he made that vase,
coloured it blue
fired from her calcified remains
from his own furnace

my revenge being complete
I filled it with daffodils and crocuses
cherishing her memories

26 comments:

anthonynorth said...

when he made that vase,
coloured it blue
fired from her calcified remains

Delicious :-)

ThomG said...

Wow, dark and brooding. I like this very much.

gigidiaz said...

I love the darkness in this. It's bitter and sweet

Lorraine said...

The mind of a pessimist and the Soul of an artist, you are unbelievably talented!

amanda said...

I loved the ending it is very .... final, it brings closure (for me at least) for the vase it's self.
Lovely.

Missy said...

Now that was a useful vase/urn. Sinister coupled with bit of retribution. Great take on the prompt.

Missy said...

works well for carry on tuesday too!

Sweetest in the Gale said...

Dark, biting and sharp...wonderful read!

Mark said...

Wow...well done.

Americanising Desi said...

a masterpiece!
bravo!

http://fart-in-a-jar.blogspot.com/2009/08/confused.html

keith said...

Absolutely marvellous! Sinister and dark yet it brough a hint of a smile to my face!

Tumblewords: said...

I adore revenge!

Just someone said...

Fired from her calcified remains - eerie...

Dark, but then revenge is sweet!

Stan Ski said...

Sweet,sweet revenge...dark and ironic...brilliant!

Bobbie said...

Like this!! Not vengeful, but I can think it LOL! Great writing :)

cyclopseven said...

The vase hold the mean for his end. Hope it is not real:). Good piece.

Michelle Johnson said...

This is a great poem. I feel as though some frustrations were released while still remembering the loved one in a kind way. Hope all is well. Have a great night.

aspiemom said...

This was a very dark piece. Wow. It reminded me of Devil in the White City, especially the furnace.

*shuddering*

Great writing and story telling!

Megha said...

Nice work. Love and revenge together..

Jeeves said...

Dark and lovely

Larry McCay said...

Excellent - thanks for sharing...

--SoC

Ann (bunnygirl) said...

Such an innocent-sounding item, yet so sinister. Nicely done!

KB said...

I'm afraid...I'm very afraid.

Leo said...

dark! very dark!

liked the first verse a lot...

:)

One Big Happy Family

Daily Panic said...

wow! I love the way the prompt words all tied this together.
Jinx is a hard word and in this it makes perfect sense.
happy 3WW!

OpenChannel said...

holy moly... that was dark and a bit creepy. fun to read outloud, slowly.

Gautami - re: 3:15, you can join us any time! You don't have to do the whole month. :-)