I dip the spoon into the coagulated milk
and let out coarse curses
I rant like a diode gone wrong
static of the radio bustles at me
your salacious sagas bore me to death
I run away and hitch a ride
and think of the fling I had long ago
now leaving behind another rancid past
I am homeward bound
enjoying the ride in that 8-track road
elocution of my joy akin to froth
25 comments:
Good poem GT.The secret is in the 7 minutes.
Powerful and a good combination of the words.
Nothing pisses me more off than cream gone bad in my coffee, I relate lol love the rant here ;)
another winner...7 minutes, huh? Mine took 7 DAYS and is not nearly as good...
I love that last line! It so perfectly draws a picture the joy!
Hello Gautami,
This story works! I like "and think of the fling I had long ago
now leaving behind another rancid past"
This is very good Gautami!
I love how this poem intrigues; it balances on the fine edge of my not understanding it (which is NOT a bad thig at all). Rather, it tempts me with another view, a different world, raises poetic questions...
I'm amazed at how different people's poems can be using a similar set of words (even some not specified). So many great stories, including yours. Glad to discover your blog too.
You really do a great job with this week's words!
Love the sound of "let out coarse curses"
I agree with Deborah that I'm not sure if I completely grasp it, but the sounds are lovely and it draws me in.
gautami your brevity works well with this poem, short bursts that place the reader on the side of the narrator. the challenge words couple nicely with the subject matter. -lawrence
Nice write of the words.. and done so quickly.
All those words - combined to great effect.
I'm pleased with the title you chose -- it's my favorite line ... I love the energy in it, and in the poem.
My god. U spinned a nice one here. Like a story
This one might have been over my head, but I just couldn't get the significance of the italicised words. Did I miss something? Probably. I liked it anyway.
Ok, I get the exercise now. I commented too soon!
From Therese B. at RWP -- coarse curses from coagulated milk -- I can hear them now.
My favourite line here has to be "enjoying the ride in that 8-track road". Good use of the words here. I like.
-Nicole
oh, my!
I have done this myself, although not with the 8-track playing.
great work!
good one for sure...again...7 mins are good. I often write in 7 mins or ......but usually cary arround in my head for hours ...days...months or many years.
This is absolutely great poetry. I loved the use of salacious, 8-track and froth. Keep up the good work.
What a beautiful thing your words created. Thanks so much
I love "salacious sagas." Good use of the words throughout. I like how the anger seems to cool when the speaker hits the road.
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