Sunday, August 30, 2009

knife's edge

ten years is long time
memories fade, people forget
it felt good to be back
the house felt just the same
both stayed up late,
cleaning and rearranging
in the dead of the night
when he woke up
to the telephone ringing
three times, maybe four
(who cares when one is aroused from deep sleep)
before he could get to it,
he found himself sprawled on the floor
with cold ghostly hands throttling him
and knife's edge almost cutting into him
his dad freaked out at the almost severed neck
when he ran around to check who was it
no doors or windows were found open

invisible footprints led his dad under the kitchen sink
he baulked at the memory of it-
the same place they had buried their reclusive neighbour
his dad could see a shape of a door on it


Anonymous said...

oof... this was dark! scary!

well written Gautami!

Lorraine said...

Dark, dark ...memory? nightmare? dark fiction? call it anything, it's genre noir and you do it soooo superbly

Whitesnake said...

You really should change ya diet.......

Gemma Wiseman said...

Never feed the dark side! It has a foul habit of getting hungry again!
A rumbling write!

George S Batty said...

a little rat poison takes care of those that sneak in from the sink door. works every time

Janice Thomson said...

Wow! What a twist at the end - the dark side at its best.

Stan Ski said...

Phew...! Glad my neighbours are nice people.

Melissa Russell said...

There's nothing as frightening as a revenge seeking ghost!! Woot this gave me goosepimples

Jeeves said...


anthonynorth said...

Dark, mysterious, spooky. I liked it :-)

Julia Phillips Smith said...

Love this one:

'invisible footprints led his dad under the kitchen sink'

Really shivery!

Vita Stunder said...

Well written!!

Beth P. said...

well alrighty then!
a dream within a dream?

Fantasies of a Lifetime said...

I will double check my doors and windows tonight , Well written !!

illyria taylor said...

Folks we have an original! Cheers!

Anonymous said...

Nice treatment of one of the good ones.

Jessie said...

dark ... it reminds me of something, now what could it be???
oh i know!

Well Done!

Cynthia Short said...

Oooh, I liked this little bit of evil...gave me the "creeps" which means you definitely did what you wanted to!

ds said...


Anonymous said...

I really liked this. Spooky, tense, dark. I do like it when your noir side comes out!

keith said...

Creepy stuff. I love it when you write like this!

V said...

Interesting. Spooky. I liked it.

ladygarfield said...

quite spooky.. and frightening. such a treat!