Thursday, August 20, 2009

static of the radio bustles at me














I dip the spoon into the coagulated milk
and let out coarse curses
I rant like a diode gone wrong
static of the radio bustles at me
your salacious sagas bore me to death
I run away and hitch a ride
and think of the fling I had long ago
now leaving behind another rancid past
I am homeward bound
enjoying the ride in that 8-track road
elocution of my joy akin to froth

25 comments:

rallentanda said...

Good poem GT.The secret is in the 7 minutes.

anthonynorth said...

Powerful and a good combination of the words.

Lorraine said...

Nothing pisses me more off than cream gone bad in my coffee, I relate lol love the rant here ;)

Cynthia Short said...

another winner...7 minutes, huh? Mine took 7 DAYS and is not nearly as good...

Linda Jacobs said...

I love that last line! It so perfectly draws a picture the joy!

Derrick said...

Hello Gautami,

This story works! I like "and think of the fling I had long ago
now leaving behind another rancid past"

Lisa said...

This is very good Gautami!

Deborah Godin said...

I love how this poem intrigues; it balances on the fine edge of my not understanding it (which is NOT a bad thig at all). Rather, it tempts me with another view, a different world, raises poetic questions...

Francis Scudellari said...

I'm amazed at how different people's poems can be using a similar set of words (even some not specified). So many great stories, including yours. Glad to discover your blog too.

Nathan said...

You really do a great job with this week's words!

djvorreyer said...

Love the sound of "let out coarse curses"

I agree with Deborah that I'm not sure if I completely grasp it, but the sounds are lovely and it draws me in.

Lawrence Gladeview said...

gautami your brevity works well with this poem, short bursts that place the reader on the side of the narrator. the challenge words couple nicely with the subject matter. -lawrence

Irene Toh said...

Nice write of the words.. and done so quickly.

Stan Ski said...

All those words - combined to great effect.

Deb said...

I'm pleased with the title you chose -- it's my favorite line ... I love the energy in it, and in the poem.

Jeeves said...

My god. U spinned a nice one here. Like a story

Maxine said...

This one might have been over my head, but I just couldn't get the significance of the italicised words. Did I miss something? Probably. I liked it anyway.

Maxine said...

Ok, I get the exercise now. I commented too soon!

Anonymous said...

From Therese B. at RWP -- coarse curses from coagulated milk -- I can hear them now.

Raven's Wing Poetry said...

My favourite line here has to be "enjoying the ride in that 8-track road". Good use of the words here. I like.

-Nicole

angie said...

oh, my!
I have done this myself, although not with the 8-track playing.
great work!

Wayne Pitchko said...

good one for sure...again...7 mins are good. I often write in 7 mins or ......but usually cary arround in my head for hours ...days...months or many years.

Michelle Johnson said...

This is absolutely great poetry. I loved the use of salacious, 8-track and froth. Keep up the good work.

Diane said...

What a beautiful thing your words created. Thanks so much

James said...

I love "salacious sagas." Good use of the words throughout. I like how the anger seems to cool when the speaker hits the road.