Sunday, August 02, 2009

white curtains bellow from an open window

white curtains bellow from an open window

the villain has the hero cornered
who manages to escape out a window,
when the bad guy kicks the door
the drapes move wildly

the low streams of Brahms' cello
along with the wind whistling noisily
calms the atmosphere down to a reverie
while the veil ripples gently

white curtains anticipate police catching up soon


35 comments:

anthonynorth said...

Those windows are disclosing quite a crime.

Greyscale Territory said...

Love the powerful use of the word "veil" and how it seems to come alive in the energy of the atmosphere!

Lorraine said...

You always take me somewhere unexpected, you're quite the thriller ;)

DeLi said...

windows, the silent witness

Mandy said...

I can see the scene playing on the television.

SandyCarlson said...

I imagine delicate, lovely curtains and a place of calm. The aggression taking place at the place really jars. Very effective.

songofsea said...

Interesting.

Sweetest in the Gale said...

I loved how you made the white curtains a major character in this adventure. You really brought them to life, and that is such a unique perspective. Loved it!

Tarun Mitra said...

bollywood movie from a Curtains perspective, very innovative....

Maggie said...

I could see these windows on my tv and I think the idea of the curtains being a witness to the crime is neat.

lissa said...

interesting point of view, these curtains can tell a story, much like a person

Sue said...

tells a compelling story with strong images.

Tammie Lee said...

You have painted the scene wonderfully with your words. I love the billowing curtains.

Spirithelpers

Deborah godin said...

Loved this, very cinematic!

Michelle Johnson said...

Effective and interesting take on the prompt. What the window and curtains could tell the police. Wow.

Jennifer Hicks said...

what an imaginative take on the prompt. your words are so full of life and movement!

Amias said...

Interesting take on the prompt. Remind me of a lot of tv shows ... where the window is the star.

Understanding Alice said...

ooh, thats different :)

JP/deb said...

Very interesting - love the images. The white curtains do not end up being surrunder, but instead escapte. Nice twist.

JP/deb

spacedlaw said...

But maybe the window is just a decoy,
The villain poised behind the door,
Ready to pounce.

keith said...

An interesting scene you've set here!

floreta said...

what a scene! i love how you play music into this :)

Bobbie said...

Wonderful writing! So easy to visualize :)

Dee Martin said...

I love the ambience in this

Linda Jacobs said...

Boy, you can really create atmosphere! Love this!

quin browne said...

well done!!

gabrielle said...

Rear Window, I see it in black and white, engaging all the senses.

one more believer said...

a most delightful piece g... who knew bad guy, windows and billowing curtains could be...

Patti said...

Oh I like this~ very visual and storytelling-ish. Wonder what happened next?
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Quiet Paths said...

I am smiling at this escapade in words! Super job!

James Steerforth said...

A great one to stimulate one's imagination!

Tumblewords: said...

Terrific scene setting!

Jeeves said...

Interesting windows

Jim said...

Hi G.T, I like it! "There will be a brief intermission, please ..."
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Just someone said...

like a movie plot:)

I like the white curtains waiting for the police line:)