Wednesday, October 21, 2009

memories jive tirelessly

metallic blues jangles in the background
reckless me, jives tirelessly
dad, your words
move in and out
after countless years
silhouette within the walls
of memories jiggles
my heartache is contained
because you reinforced it that way
that speck of paper in my pocket
scented with your love
drives away my blues
metallic sheen of jangling bangles
makes me heart whole yet again


22 comments:

mark said...

Quite the heart-warming ode to somebody dear.

Well done...

anthonynorth said...

Beautiful.

ThomG said...

I see no signs of slowing down. A lot of good lines in this, and it emits emotion like sparks.

Cricket said...

very nice tribute - I wonder what is on the paper???

swapna said...

Beautifully conveys the heartache and then the jangling bangles gathers the pieces together to make it whole again. Wonderful take on the prompt.

Sweetest in the Gale said...

This was beautiful...that piece of paper must be very special. I'm glad it gives strength!

MichaelO said...

Wise recitations echo in your heart, keeping your forward trajectory through life. Blessings.

Tumblewords: said...

Strong words of nostalgia and heartache - Nice work!

b said...

As always, beautiful.

b

http://torristravels.blogspot.com/2009/10/habit-of-thinking.html

Cynthia Short said...

I love this, the way you used the J words so perfectly within the piece...very nice!

Zouxzoux said...

"that speck of paper in my pocket
scented with your love"

a beautiful tribute to that special person.

Just someone said...

This is as great as any!

A beautiful piece:)

Ann (bunnygirl) said...

I like the way you go back to the beginning and repeat the words, but with a twist. You've posed some questions here...

Rajlakshmi said...

such a lovely piece... touching... the words are still echoing...very beautifully penned.

lissa said...

a wonderful piece to remember someone by

should it be "makes 'my' heart whole yet again" instead of "makes 'me' heart whole yet again"? not quite sure of this part, I guess I dont' like quite like reading "makes 'me' heart whole yet again", but it's just me

Bone said...

Your words are always interesting, different. Never cliched.

Yellow Tulip said...

:)...beautiful:)

~willow~ said...

I'm curious about the speck of paper. :)

illyria taylor said...

Gosh G, your bad stuff is just as good as your normal stuff. Gorgeous as usual

PS : De-abbreviate as you like ;) said...

Simple but yet so touching !!

cyclopseven said...

Poignant memories hallowed by love lasting ever. Nice.

Greyscale Territory said...

Love the idea of memories jiving ~ like some frantic, endless dance ~ like the dervishes! Very graphic!