in that misted dawn
lantern of the sun
touches my skin
that first kiss of the day
shows me the way
to face a day, any day
without your presence
that mildest of essence
sends me to a seance
out of my window
my visions lay low
towards the sea I bow
I feel more kisses, so light
from that first light
before it gets dazzling bright
my descent to the concrete
is a follow up for ascent to the sky
I need to get out of that attic more often
lantern of the sun
touches my skin
that first kiss of the day
shows me the way
to face a day, any day
without your presence
that mildest of essence
sends me to a seance
out of my window
my visions lay low
towards the sea I bow
I feel more kisses, so light
from that first light
before it gets dazzling bright
my descent to the concrete
is a follow up for ascent to the sky
I need to get out of that attic more often
30 comments:
beautiful dear:)..enjoyed my read;)
Another gem! How do you do it?!
An original take on the prompt. I like it.
Beautiful, visual and warm.
i think a first kiss can transform one's life in ways unimaginable. and then, your ending spruced my thoughts in a new direction. great write. hope all is well.
Golly, now I know why I can't get up and out anymore. I am missing that catalytic kiss of my morning.
This is cute. With the exception of the last verse your rhyme works well. Keeping those is hard with the short lines.
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I personally loved the connection between kisses and light. What a great thought! (Thank you for your opinion on which haiku.)
All very pretty and romantic and light until that concrete (reality?) bites? A slight twist of irony?
Loved the rhyme and the essense of it. Beautiful take on the prompt.
Light and kiss and hope....And survival out there. I enjoyed this very much.
I loved this poem...especially the last line, which made me smile.
That first kiss is all it takes for a good day. Nice imagery too.
:) wonderful first kiss!! a gem of a poem!
Wow, so moving and bright, strange lol and beautiful
I love the image of the "lantern of the sun" Gautami! Also the idea of descending to start the day -- as if the night time were on a higher plane metaphorically as well as up in the attic!
Indeed the attic can clutter a person`s visions...loved your awakening.
This poetry brought a smile at this end. Thank you.
i need to spend more time here...
your words remind me of morning prayer at dawn, as the first rays bathe the world...& how "re-entry" into the day's mundane can be jarring.
such a grand first kiss~
Spirithelpers
It's not good to stay in the attic - glad you can be freed by a kiss. Neat work!
Loved the first verse best, but it was all gorgeous!
As always my friend, you make me reach out to poetry, which is not my thing, and I am happy for it.
I like this stanza:
'that first kiss of the day
shows me the way
to face a day, any day'
As well as the way you wrap up the poem.
Liked the surprise ending to this - you always have such original ideas.
nicely done--you always seem to have a "hook" at the end of your poems. I was also intrigued by the rhyme scheme--with all but the first and last verses rhyming.
A lovely surprise at the end. Very well done. Thank you.
I love the way the rhyme falls apart at the end.
Nicely done- very creative use of rhyme!
That is beautiful!
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