Wednesday, March 24, 2010

doing the undoing

I come undone
in totality
when your brazen hunger
nuzzles me
I nuzzle into you
my hunger is not brazenly defined
yet it too totally
does you in

15 comments:

Lilibeth said...

Certainly gets the idea across--wow.

Andy Sewina said...

Beautiful words, I love the way you wrote this!

<3 Andy

anthonynorth said...

It does indeed. Great words.

Carina said...

Well written, and very strong!

ThomG said...

I really like the heat of this, the obvious desire.

Lorraine said...

I have been missing you, something ghostly this way came....;)

AnnSecret said...

WOW. Despite being an Indian and a Mathematics teacher, you are really really good!

Ofira Sephiroth said...

Great choice of words.

iamyuva said...

wow... eloquent...

Stan Ski said...

A kind of Jack Sprat and his wife scenario, only much more subtly portrayed.

Greyscale Territory said...

A touch of seriousness and a touch of wry humour! Love the mix!

Dee Martin said...

Love the counterpoint - you come undone - he is done in - great stuff!

Amity said...

Wow...this is really an exciting take on the prompt Gautami...I could feel the excitement...:))

Thomma Lyn said...

Oooh, great job -- you portray the passionate cross currents so well. :)

one more believer said...

an exchange without cost...yes, no!!??