Friday, December 03, 2010

astral music

I nudge corners
into the centre
they resist
I persist
my hammer hits again
a column resonates
I hear astral music
in a sandbox

door frames shake
as I chisel away the concrete
I want mud walls
on which I can do finger painting

"enough space you saved for me, give it to me now"

39 comments:

Brian Miller said...

intriguing...so what does astral music sound like? carving out our own space...i get that...

Dick said...

Intriguing indeed. Is the final italicised line a quote?

HOOTIN' ANNI said...

Very very interesting....we, as the reader, can interpret this in our own mind...one way or another. To me, that makes a fiction so very right!!!


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chiccoreal said...

"Astral Music" makes the creative vibe a prime impetus that gives so much more a resounding construct! Love this poem! Relate to; "I want mud wall on which I can do finger painting"; very richly primal!

vivinfrance said...

Mind you don't hit your fingers with the hammer: you'll be needing them for the finger painting.:-)
ViV

Linda said...

I too want to know what astral music sounds like. Love the idea of finger painting on a mud wall.

Asobime said...

The music of the spheres. We are all gifted by the Universe. That's what poetry is....a gift.

Thanks for this one shot.

Lady Nyo

joanny said...

You delight us and engage all our senses,,,, tactile, sensory, visual,,,,,,,,,,and primal appeal

lovely 55er,'

joanny

liv2write2day said...

Really enjoyed this, Gautami. I like the idea of fingerpainting in mud walls.

barbara said...

they resist/ I persist. Love that bit.
( if you nudge with a hammer, I do not want to be around when you decide to be forceful)

flaubert said...

An intriguing poem Gautami.
Pamela

Alice Audrey said...

Amazing how music can fill the spaces in side ourselves.

I did a music oriented thing, too.

Claudia said...

astral music in a sandbox...wow..this sounds special

Eric Alder said...

(The preceding 55 was brought to you by "This Old House")

Nice 55, Gautami!

Tumblewords: said...

Finger painting and astral music. What could be better?

Elizabeth said...

Ah yes, a woman weilding tools with knowledge and skill, building her own space, rather than waiting for someone else to do it. I love your imagery, your words, and especially that last line,

Elizabeth

G-Man said...

Are you sure you teach Math and not Prose?
Most Excellent 55 My Friend.
Thank you so for playing and for your wonderful support.
Have a Kick Ass Week-End

Deb said...

Put me in mind of the singing sand mounds (hills) I read/heard about. Fascinating.

Teresa said...

How wonderfully fascinating! I love that idea of finger painting on mud walls.

moondustwriter said...

i like the idea of fingerpainting on mud walls

great images you portray

thanks for the visit

Happy Weekend

Wayne Pitchko said...

and I enjoyed reading.....thanks for sharing Gautami

Robin said...

love astral music in a sandbox and finger painting on mudwalls... very nice

nan said...

I always envision that astral music sounds like the slow playing of each tambura string. I loved the surreal, ethereal feel of this poem. Very nice expression.

Strummed Words said...

Proactive and deliberate carving of space. Nice one.

hedgewitch said...

Working towards the center, towards the harmony that's hidden, removing the walls. Very well-written piece, leaving space for the reader to work in as well.

Alegria Imperial said...

I can hear it with your lines--the music of the spheres, the soul, the spirit! Thank you!

Brenda said...

Like a dream...

... of the primal artist.

Magical piece, indeed!

lime said...

ah the malleable surface is indeed enviable

Caty said...

sound boxes and painting on mud walls sounds fun...I wish I knew what astral music sounded like :)

Victoria said...

I like the primal essance of carving out space, astral music, painting with fingers on mud walls - feels real.

Mary said...

Truly beautiful and enchanting writing@

caroleesherwood said...

good contrasts in this!

Stranger said...

Oh, beautiful. It gives me the feeling of being a child or having the perspective of a child playing despite this adult body. Astral Music indeed.

P.S. Thank you for visiting and commenting on my 55. I always appreciate your kind words.

Tilly Bud said...

An intriguing take on the prompt.

irene said...

Interesting how you put astral music to the hammering of concrete and finger painting of mud walls. Active imagination!

LKHarris-Kolp said...

Vivid imagery here- love it!

Cynthia Short said...

I love the idea of destroying what is supposed to be good (the concrete walls) in order to create beauty. We all need to do more of that in our lives.
Lovely piece.

Kavita said...

Very interesting! Damaging something can bring more beauty out of it... like percussion out of beating on drums!
Oh.. I really enjoyed your style here, Gautami... it's rich and has a way of really arousing the reader's interest!

sb said...

Sometimes one must get down to the basics...