when I was on the threshold of youth
that oak tree
where a three legged dog slept at night
on the edge of the lake
holding hands with a boy
I kissed in the dark nights
the dog is gone
boy is gone
I go there to find palpable emptiness
see you standing in the shadows
your arms reaching out for me
"you bring newness to this place of forgotten era"
36 comments:
Of your poems - the ones I've read that is - I like this one best. The ways in which our pasts live on - in us, and the places we inhabit (or that inhabit us) -so beautifully told. The oak tree and the three legged dog: the details that make good literature.
WOW
These words are full of fulness, everywhere, so no emptinessee possible
Love your poems Gautami!
D.
Heartfelt dreams and wishes..and lovely details!
Beautiful nostalgia - I really enjoyed reading this poem
Stong piece - really enjoyed it. Thanks.
Gautami this is impressive as always. You said so much in so few lines.
gautami,
You again prove your poetic chops!
The 'you' found at the end -- a mystery, not just a stock 'love' ending!
Trulyfool
Lovely sound to this poem...really enjoyed it ...gone, but not really ever gone...bkm
yes beautiful and poignant interweaving of time in this poem
Thanks for sharing with One Shot
MDW
A poets poem,,,, the kind of poetry that sings to a poets heart full of meaning and poetic creativity.
joanny
Lovely poem Gautami.
This amalgam of nostalgia with a tinge of sadness, is yet a happy poem, gentle and beautiful.
The wistful tone adds to the sense of nostalgia.
Sweet and tender words. I can't imagine why the boy ever left.
Nice One Shot, Gautami!
nice...the past passes, though not always easy to find a newness waiting to be seen...
I like the imagery in this, especially the connect between the memory of the first few lines and the shadow of the last few.
-Nicole
Nice. The three-legged dog was a nice touch.
How wonderful it would be to go back again, and find what one thought was lost.
Beautiful words of meaningful places. :o)
Rhyme Me a Smile
bringing newness into forgotten places...this is beautiful
a touching write... absolutely beautiful
Touchy..beautiful..damn,it is just so true..nothing last forever,but emptiness that is refilled with our choices.i definitely am enjoying reading you more with every post.thank you so much for sharing..:)
your sentiment is despondent yet hopeful as well. I am amazed when someone's writing makes me feel two opposite feelings like yours did here. In my humble opinion, this is a sign of a great poem!
nice turn between the palpable emptiness and the reaching (empty) arms.
The longing and loneliness is, indeed, tangible here. Creates a mood of wistfulness bordering on sadness very nicely. Fine piece of writing.
This weaves well the spell of youthful places. Good piece.
Oh, the memories you've stirred. How nicely done.
As part of its unpredictable nature, Love seems to have this beautiful way of filling up empty spaces...
I like the way the built and tension was created here...only to end so beautifully..
I love your attention to detail. You really have given a glimmer of hope to an otherwise sad poem.
Fond memories fill time lost, with hope of loving again, filling the emptiness today.
What a soft look back through time. Seeking emptiness only to find love. sweet flow on this one Gautami
Gautami --- This truly is a VERY touching poem!! I like this very much.
Very familiar. We all need our special place. Very comfortable.
Beautiful, bittersweet poem of love and loss. The beauty of the scene presents itself through the details you add. Bravo!
Absolutely beautiful Gautami.
Pamela
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Very nice write! I loved it!
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