Wednesday, December 22, 2010

dead woman and her wants

dead woman wants a clock, one that records her space in a time of her choosing
a space that can't be defined by demarcations, but by her aura
dead woman can't emit an aura, and that makes her sad and she sits down to cry
her tears can't be seen, or felt by her but they flow heedlessly
a mirror, dead woman wishes to see herself in that, all her glory revealed to herself
if only glory could be changed into an object, she would be glad to do that
silence of the dead woman is so deadening, that it scares her too
she strings in the silence, wears it on her neck, wishing someone to buy it from her
dead that she is, yet she wishes to educate us about her ghostly appearance
shadow of herself is so interesting, we can see myriads of colours reflected on sky
swift movements of the ropes topples over her, she is so dead, yet she lives

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I am hooked to the dead man's poetry. I find that it gives me the freedom to pursue my thoughts in ways, I can't explain or understand. But I like the outcome. I feel so liberated after writing these pieces. And for the last two days, I was thinking maybe my muse is going to die. Dead man's poetry WILL get me out of it.

34 comments:

Joyce Ellen Davis said...

Tami, your poetry just gets better and better! Truly, I am so impressed with you!

Joyce Ellen Davis said...

High Fives!

brenda w said...

I love it! So glad you continued with the dead woman poems, what a treat you've provided...
~Brenda

mark said...

Good stuff. I echo what Joyce said in her first comment....

Iliteratepoet said...

Innovative, I like it! Great 'OneShot' :)

Elizabeth said...

Gautami, I was very tempted to do the same thing and find the same response to the Dead Woman poems. There is something within the form itself that breathes of a freedom only thought about but definitely wanted and wished for. I really, really like this poem, both its sadness and its acceptance.

Elizabeth

flaubert said...

Gautami, this "dead woman poem" is fantastic. You have certainly captured the essence of the form.
A poignant piece.
Pamela

Claudia said...

this is so interesting - some great lines like.. dead woman wants a clock, one that records her space..a fascinating write with some food for thoughts..

jaerose said...

'dead woman wants a clock' - what a stunning opening sentence. This series of poems are just so powerful..Jae

Bone said...

I really liked the line, "silence of the dead woman is so deafening that it scares her too."

It's always a treat when something or someone inspires us in ways that we've not been before.

Ramesh Sood said...

'she is so dead, yet she lives'

She will continue to.. God bless!

vivinfrance said...

A truly inspiring poem - you've seen beauty in the "dead man" form that passed a great many of us by.
Bravo.

Linda Jacobs said...

Good for you! It's so cool when we are refreshed by something new. I agree about that deafening silence line!

Eric Alder said...

The dead woman can't have any of those things - her credit cards have all been cancelled. (LOL!)

Nice One Shot, Gautami!

Desert Rose said...

Impressive ..unique and i like :)

irene said...

An imaginative approach. I do wonder how it's to be both dead and alive.

sharplittlepencil said...

My favorite line, Dead woman has no aura... However the Dead Man Cycle began, keep it coming. You are onto something here, Gautami, and I'm into it. 3WW, whenever I see your name, I automatically click to see what you're up to.

Thanks. My takes on it are here:
http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2010/12/23/control-questioning-authority-three-wd-weds/

Peace, Amy

Wayne Pitchko said...

nicely done Gautami...loved it....I really like this form also...so enjoy the moment....and the season...Cheers

lalita choudhary said...

Well done!!

Sumit Sarkar said...

Wonderful imagination and very creative this is... :)

Bill said...

someone has oiled
the cemetery gate
winter sky

Happy New Year, Gautami.

Mama Zen said...

Outstanding.

christopher said...

Gautami, this is really really good.

vivinfrance said...

These are building into a worthwhile collection. Bravo.

One Stop - The Place For Poets, Writers and Artists said...

the opener was a fantastic pull..really enjoyable read...lots to think here...thanks for the share..pete

sage said...

Very good! I like the thought of the dead bringing our voices to life!

Elizabeth said...

Second time around and found a whole new level of liking your poem and the form itself. It is so exciting to have something grab that drive inside and take it somewhere different, somewhere new. Congratulations,

Elizabeth

annell said...

Well done! Thanks so much!

Laurie Kolp said...

What a lively dead woman poem! Love the vivid details.

djvorreyer said...

The stream of consciousness feel really pulls the reader along. Glad the dead man idea is working for you!

S.E.Ingraham said...

This is amazing stuff - draws you in and keeps you guessing; great use of the dead poet form ...

Tilly Bud said...

It's great to find a poetic form you feel comfortable with; I'm like that with haiku/senryu.

deb said...

The form is working on your behalf! There are some terrific images in this. So glad you like the form!

Tumblewords: said...

You're working so well with the form - amazing how much it has opened in your hands...