Tuesday, December 28, 2010

patching up...last line first line

patches in snatches

patches of sunlight
I try to gather
in my palm locking all in my fingers

I also gather beads
thread them with wires of sunlight
enclosing the warmth

those snatches of wind
(fancy those!)
I collect in my hand towel

in the upcoming days of drought
I will take all of these out
and fill my emptiness

"can anyone hold transient nostalgia?"

I look the last line of the poem above, patches in snatches, and made that the first line in the poem below and let it go wherever it wanted to, all by itself.

patching up

can anyone hold transient nostalgia?
Is it not an absurd concept
dancing inside one's head

if forks toppled over
spoons held their head high
bowl of dough mixed so well

but why talk of mundane
in the midst of all this?
dancing thoughts can have a pattern

"let it sit for a while, I will find a way 
out of nostalgia, absurd or not"

23 comments:

Bill said...

All the best in the new year, Gautami. A season for nostalgia, transient or not.

Ramesh Sood said...

And it reached .. all by itself..
Very beautifully weaved.. Gautami!!!

Dulce said...

Nostalgia. I love taht word and what it brings to my mind and heart. great post
:)

marousia said...

Lovely writing - keep doing what you are doing because it is working :)

Teresa said...

How wonderful! I love reading your poems. Have a great new year!

Timoteo said...

Love the title of the first poem!

Beachanny said...

Hope and Sunshine make life a beautiful dance..thanks for both weaving thoughts of what was into what is and picturing what will be.
Lovely, thanks. Gay

budh.aaah said...

nice one Gautami :)

dustus said...

Enjoyed both poems and the questions which the lines explore. Very nice writing.

Elizabeth said...

And the pattern can make a poem that gathers sunlight to warm nostalgia. I really like both poems Gautami. They stand separately, but go well together. I enjoyed this prompt, and think you did the same,

Elizabeth

Donald Harbour said...

Gautami, nicely done. I believe we all live in nostalgia, it's comfortable.
Regards,
Don

flaubert said...

Gautami nicely crafted. Nostalgia is something we all hold in our hearts.
A happy New Year to you.
Pamela

annell said...

Yes, I liked both poems very much! Nice work!

Brian Miller said...

nice. i really enjoyed both...and the questions you ponder...all teh best in the new year...

Eric Alder said...

I think we all gather such things.
Nice One Shot, Gautami.

Desert Rose said...

there is something about your writing that makes me tremble..smile and absolutely relate to it. And yes, Nostalgia is that powerful girl..MESMERIZING Gautami :)

marianv said...

Enjoyed both poems. The words just danced along.

Monkey Man said...

Wonderful work. I felt light and plaful just reading them. thank you.

vivinfrance said...

Elizabeth is right: these two poems are inseperable companions. I love the idea of dancing thoughts.

uma.a said...

Interesting..liked the pattern you have worked with ..nice

PattiKen said...

Very thought-provoking. It invites reading again and again. Nice. And I really like the title of the first poem.

Mary said...

Writing 'par excellence.' I think we have to collect everything we can when we can ... so we have it available during the upcoming days of drought! Have a happy new year!

Steve Isaak said...

Superb work - images and theme work perfectly together.