Saturday, December 04, 2010

plateau

in the bin of tangled up holiday,
lights switch off all by themselves.
my fingers cut into my palm
but I search for my platinum ring.
in the darkness
when a soft breath moves against me;
I push it to the plateau
of shaking rattle of my body.
I fill the leaks,
while you free me with your tenseness.

"when my solitaire falls to ground, my plateau becomes a mountain"

31 comments:

Teresa said...

What a very creative and unique take on the prompt! Well done!

Teresa said...

Wonderful. Sensual. Thought provoking.

Kudos!

Koby said...

What Teresa said.... :-)

Cheryl said...

Beautiful piece. Had to read it a couple of times to let it all sink in.

Claudia said...

oh wow - this was full of sensual beauty - nice!

Kat said...

Your words are always so moving. This was such a beautiful take on the prompt, very unexpected and lovely. Kat

Sue said...

A lot of punch in just a few words.

Evocative.

=)

Ramesh Sood said...

OH, what an imagination and the words you always weave.. very unique..Thanks..

And thanks also for through your page I could visit Bill's haiku-usa.. oh, my ever increasing passion for haikus.

Jackie said...

I have to agree this was very sensual .

Tina said...

Wow. That was great! How you managed to fit the prompt into such a layered poem is amazing.

liv2write2day said...

I so enjoy your work, Gautami. You draw the reader in to the experience through your images.

Viki said...

This was beautiful. Such strong feelings. Good job.

Tammie said...

this is quite intense....

Harshad mehta said...

Freedom indeed.

Nanka said...

Uniquely creative and intense!!

SandyCarlson said...

Intensely freeing. What we do for each other! A beautiful search for and discovery of perfection in an imperfect place.

Sweetest in the Gale said...

Your words were subtle, yet the sensuality behind them was very powerful. Wonderful poem!

nimaruichi said...

...you free me with your tenseness...
:)

Reflections said...

Creative, sensual piece... rising to the plateau. Well done

Ames said...

Oooh the things that happen when the lights go out! Very sensual!~Ames

DeLi said...

made me feel reflective...and a bit sad...

moving

Rawknrobyn.blogspot.com said...

This is deep and beautifully written.
xoRobyn

ρομπερτ said...

A unique 'word-picture' - impressed !

Please have a good start into the new week.

daily athens

Jingle Poetry said...

inventive writing..
well done.

EKSwitaj said...

interesting paradox at the end

Judie said...

Excellent piece!

cj Schlottman said...

This poem is visual and sensual, and so very well done. You are a wonderful poet.

Namaste.........cj

Malisa said...

Ooooh! A lusty Christmas! Woo hoo! I enjoyed your beautiful words.

I just posted my story today. Please stop by and read.

Malisa

Rek said...

Wow, a totally different take on the prompt...intense and strong... ;)

Tgoette said...

Nicely done! A very unique and creative take on the prompt.

Jenny said...

Wow. Where did this come from? I am always fascinated by the direction you take these prompts. Your writing always makes me strive harder to find creative directions in my own. Thank you for that. Thank you for linking.