Tuesday, February 08, 2011

ransom

your green eyes beguile me
with a hint of a smile
vast sea behind you cannot diminish your aura

that mind stretches mine to limits
that voice pushes me beyond me
yet I only see that defined chin

my cerebral nature has turned verbal
intellectual into sensual
I seriously pretend to be casual

I pick up the sensitivity
gently hold it to me
let essence of senses take over me

"the mafia that is you holds me to ransom"

22 comments:

Timoteo said...

Love that last line!

Brian Miller said...

this was a delicious write...and yes that last line rocked...

Caty said...

As usual, I loved your write. And I agree that last line was priceless!

Beachanny said...

Rings so true - not wanting to give way and yet your heart falling captive against perhaps your better judgment. Well written dear. Yes, it was a brilliant last line.

Teresa said...

What a wonderful sensual poem! I love this one.

marousia said...

Beautifully crafted sensual poem - thank you

budh.aaah said...

Nice very very nice Gautami. you write so well.

irene said...

The words reverberate..the last line sums it up.

Mary said...

I love the way you worked with all three prompts to create this poem! Well crafted. I liked the third stanza: intellectual into sensual!

Judy Roney said...

I like your style and what you said about this being your interpretation of the prompt. That is what poetry is about and I forget that. I really like this poem and I like the way you end with senses taking over you. Then the clincher at the end! Well done!

barbara said...

That would make one heck of a valentine. Head over heels.

flaubert said...

Gautami this is sensual poem. I agree with Judy, it is our interpretation of the prompts. That is what poetry is all about.

Pamela

Elizabeth said...

Beautifully sensuous. Absolutely love where you took this prompt. I had a difficult time with it and almost skipped it completely. Did however find inspiration. I love what you do Gautami,

Elizabeth

Eric 'Bubba' Alder said...

These are the words of someone in love. Great stuff, Gautami!

Shashi said...

I enjoyed it so much.. Thanks for sharing...
Last line was perfect...

ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/02/whispers-another-kind-of-valentines-day.html

Myrna R. said...

Passionate and sensual. What a tribute to a lover.

Asobime said...

A lovely love poem.....dips into the good part of exotic.

Lady Nyo

lightverse said...

I agree with so many of the other posters here - this is a lush, sensual, sensuous poem - and it is gorgeous.

Claudia said...

so nice...and the last line was a powerful "wow"

Susannah said...

Very nice! :-)

Kavita said...

This was such an intense One Shot... beautiful! I think I can relate to this one all too well, Gautami.. :)
And I really like those last lines (the one in quotes) of your poems... they are the perfect summary!!!

Soraya said...

A mix of sensuality, beauty and images... I like it. Thanks for sharing and for visiting and left a kind comment in my poem :-)