Tuesday, February 01, 2011

uneven

In the cobbled stones

I let my dreams run riot
I think of flaky pastries
soft and melting 
may be a chocolate brownie too
sprinkled with nuts

is it paint that has coagulated
sticking to my shoes?
I prefer mud
which has your footprints
cemented in it

butter-papered biscuits
burnt in the oven
hardened to carbon
I am left with cobblestones
mortar to bind the

"if you want you can taste the ground"

26 comments:

anthonynorth said...

Powerful words, as always.

Old Ollie said...

"which has your footprints
cemented in it"

Cool line!

Ramesh Sood said...

Another good one..

Tess Kincaid said...

Who would have thought bricks could make me so hungry?

Lyn said...

What a mixture of strength and temptation..can feel it all!!

Short Poems said...

Powerful and wise words, love it :)

Kristen Haskell said...

I said this before but I will say it again. The muddy prints always tell us where we have been.

Suko said...

I love this poem, from title to chocolate brownie to tasting the ground.

Mary said...

Beautiful images in this poem make me hungry as I read.

Elizabeth said...

Gautami, really like this one, like the delicate bits of food, interspersed with the images of bricks and cemented footprints. As usual, really good writing,

Elizabeth

flaubert said...

Gautami beautiful images created here.
Pamela

Trulyfool said...

Gautami,

Wonderful images knocking against each other (as so often you do!)

Trulyfool

Joseph Harker said...

My favorite part was actually:
"butter-papered biscuits
burnt in the oven
hardened to carbon"

Maybe not as appetizing as those brownies, but a fantastic chain of phrases.

Tumblewords: said...

Oh, nicely done - as usual. Love the butter-papered biscuits...

signed...bkm said...

I can see the chocolate brownies in those bricks... the second half of poem is powerful.."mud, which has your footprints cemented in it..." nice...bkm

Linda said...

So many food references from bricks. Although I've had some food that resembled bricks. Nice job.

girldaydreaming said...

incredibly delicate and enticing... lovely.

Caty said...

this was very enticing...chocolate brownies with nuts..I love leaving footprints in the mud. Enjoyed it as always!

spacedlaw said...

Interesting vision. The thought of all this food makes me hungry.

lightverse said...

This was such an amazing poem - and your imagination really does run riot! So much brilliant imagery! I am hungry just reading your words!

Jinksy said...

I prefer mud
which has your footprints
cemented in it

Aww!! :)

irene said...

There's a palatable strangeness about this.

Reflections said...

Love the footprints you have left here... cemented for the world to find.

Pam (@iwriteinbooks) said...

Oh I like both of these. They're both "beautiful" in their own ways, different than the other and different from probably the conventional definition of beautiful.

ravenswingpoetry.com said...

The imagery is beautiful here, especially in the second stanza. And the first stanza made me hungry. :)

-Nicole

Jingle said...

wondrous tale.
well penned.