Poetry for me is a way of living, it comes out of nowhere and I have to write it down. How I write, what I write, I decide. I am not asking you to be judgemental. I am gifted with the ability to see beyond the obvious.
Wednesday, April 11, 2007
Pencilled
inner-most secrets; rants on just about anything, journals of plan hitherto unseen. diary full of deep dark thoughts- lies, betrayals, broken trusts, impaired dreams.
witnessing it all in somber bemoan pencil stays mute its lead busted.
i was thinking it's a good thing it's in pencil--with the dark thoughts and lies and betrayals--that way you can erase, then I got to the last line and smiled
You know Gautami, your poem got me thinking...what if pencils had a way to convey what their previous owners had written...there would be secrets galore to share!
anne: The crux of the matter is I am trying to write on inanimate objects. I started on statinery series as I am teacher and these are all familiar objects for me. I already wrote on blackboard, stapler, chalks etc etc.
My thoughts do not enter into it. I write what I think that objects feels.
10 comments:
Poor pencil, and poor you.
i was thinking it's a good thing it's in pencil--with the dark thoughts and lies and betrayals--that way you can erase, then I got to the last line and smiled
this is a lot like my tanka that I just posted.
dont we all end up like this, someday?
Like this ... well written.
witnessing it all
in somber bemoan
pencil stays mute
its lead busted
hugs for you.
You know Gautami, your poem got me thinking...what if pencils had a way to convey what their previous owners had written...there would be secrets galore to share!
anne: Why? Neither is poorer! Infact we are richer by the experinces shared.
sage: I had almost left that last line. Left it as it is. Glad I did.
andrew: I will chk out your tanka.
ghost: yes. Someday is the operative word.
trinitystar: Thanks!
lotus: Isn't that scary at times?
Why?
Because it sounds as if the pencil is sad, and maybe you too. :(
anne: The crux of the matter is I am trying to write on inanimate objects. I started on statinery series as I am teacher and these are all familiar objects for me. I already wrote on blackboard, stapler, chalks etc etc.
My thoughts do not enter into it. I write what I think that objects feels.
:D
I enjoy your writing so much. What a strong ending- a metaphor I can relate to.
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