Tuesday, July 03, 2007

Killing the Dead--Terza Rima

I was reading a work of fiction set in 62 AD when Britannia is at war. My pen started to flow and I wrote this. This terza rima is about a Roman slave and her Icenic master....

Killing the Dead

Driving the knife deep, turn it side to side
blood won’t be spilled, tears won’t be shed
to gloat over, to claim as victory of mind.

Numbness has set in as weighty as lead.
Tatters of heart lay on the feet, ignoring
it- go your way. How can one kill the dead

again? Why sense of loss is so foreboding
that it ceases to impinge on. Departs present,
future does not exist, neither past affecting.

cadavers cannot feel, however they resent
mutilation of the spirit. Exposed raw pores
refuse to singe, feeding revulsion- extent

of which not to be quantified. Spurting sores
promise damage, creating extensive mayhem,
however eating away discretely at the spores

well guarded by you. Yet sanity stops bedlam
she recoils, pausing demise, leaving out sham.

Update: I posted a review of The Bafut Beagles by Gerald Durrell on my Reading Room. A must read book if you have not done so by now. It is not easily available though. I got a collecters piece!

I will post soon the review of "Defy the Eagles by Lynn Bartlett"- a historical romance, from which this post was inspired. Keep checking this space!!


Steve said...

Thanks for that one

trinitystar said...

Good how you have adapted the story to poetry. Wizard with words.

Susan Helene Gottfried said...

Neat poem, Gautami! Michele sent me over; I'm impressed.

What's the name of the book you're reading? If it inspired this, it might be worth a read.

Michele said...

Stopping by to say hello....

You obviously have a gift for weaving strong and intense imagery throughout a poem.

A terza reia is a very difficult form to use, yet it does appear to just flow from your pen. Very impressive.

Sanity will indeed stop bedlam, how sad that sanity remains allusive to so many in the name of war.

Thank you for sharing your talent.

ozymandiaz said...

I bow to your prowess
I, who's words like the wings of Icarus fail me in vanity
look up to see your writing
and know I am in my place

gautami tripathy said...

Steve, trinitystar, susan, michele and oz, thanks for your comments.

This poem took a toll. It made me depressed.

polona said...

oh... that's a hard one to swallow.
but so well done - you really excel at structured poetry.

Sasha said...

hi Gautami,

The sonorous pulse of the terza rima works so well for this subject! Thanks for sharing.

I especially like the enjambment of how can one kill the dead/again - the slight pause makes it even more effective.

Rob Kistner said...

Gautami... Hello from Artheo and I. FYI -- As you are a fellow member of the Shameless Lions Writing Circle, I have a direct link to your site in the sidebar of my blog, below Artheo’s picture and poem. I see uou ar linked to my blog.
…thanks, Rob

Rax said...

the vivid imagery chills my spine. but it is true. one can kill the dead... in many a different sense. their memory for one...

Keshi said...

ur imagination soars above heavens!


kenju said...

I envy the ability to write poetry!

"...cadavers cannot feel, however they resent
mutilation of the spirit."

That line reminds me of the first time I saw an autopsy.

Michele sent me today!

Thinker said...

I loved the line how can one kill the dead again...

Anonymous said...

Gautami, you are good with structured poetry! the images you painted are very vivid.

Pat Paulk said...

I'm envious of your ability to write in form. My muse refuses to take the bit and follow rules.

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

wonderfully said

gP said...

//cadavers cannot feel, however they resent
mutilation of the spirit.//

What if the opposite is true...