outside the windowsill,
a tiny leaf sprouts
nervous of the terrain
but eager to absorb
the sunshine. light
stares back, unsmiling
willing the leaf to be
useful. sipping a little
water, it senses changes,
each pore tingling
opening to ensconce
those noxious gases
yet giving out oxygen-
sustaining all life forces.
understandings the
purpose of its life,
shoot blossoms to tree
perpetuating the world.
we, the civilized ones
ax it down to ground.
40 comments:
Wow! I really enjoyed that. Thanksvery much for the experience. This did me in:
"light
stares back, unsmiling
willing the leaf to be
useful."
Oh, Gautami- you outdid yourself today! Excellent, excellent excellent! Very apropos considering the state of the world- the little shoot and tree could be a an analogy for many different things as well...
I didn't expect that last line! Very well done.
Really nice poem - I especially like "nervous of the terrain".
Good ending - it caught me by surprise and it makes a good point.
Excellent! And the last line aptly drove home the point.
Oh my gosh, that last line really got me...powerful! And sadly true.
Wonderful poem and the last two lines, so sad and so true.
very nice :)
"willing the leaf to be useful..." your words drew us in to our mothering nature to nurture the little one to grow, please grow...which made the last line all the more powerful...
This is one of my favorites so far!
A surprise my friend. The stubborn will to live, eclipsed by the blade of civilization.
Good luck and have fun with your classes.
This kind of writing is what makes me love poetry. To embrace virtually the story of the cosmos in a few lovely words and the sad response of humankind. Great stuff.
i'm knocked down by this one.
great stuff with a poignant ending
are we loosing hope on our own capabilities and drive ourselves to destroy the world or we just don't understand the world?
Beautiful piece.
We thank the little plants for all they do to sustain our earth. Lovely. Thanks for visiting.
This poem got my emotions going, and all from a small leaf! Reducing it to that small scale makes it all the more powerful.
I love poems with a sting in the tail at the end.
I love this piece. Very very nice. And the interview I'm doing is about poet bloggers, just some general questions. Let me know if you want to partake.
This is a great poem, Gautami. No, make that amazing.
too true. sometimes we don't really appreciate what nature gives us. although I do believe that we're learning
Excellent weave of words! We definitely need to heed the process of development with more appreciation! Man has a tendency to destroy well established things quickly and without conscience! So sad!
Many fine lines in this poem! Thank you.
Very creative way to send a strong message. I could hear your poem in my head as I was reading it, and found it very lyrical... until the ending!
Lovely images and voice. I like the tenuousness in "nervous of the terrain" and the irony in "we, the civilized ones".
This deserves reading again and again...beautifully done, and the message is so urgently needed today!
Trees are so much more useful than people, if you think about it...if they chopped us down, the world would breathe a sigh of relief!
I like your image of the nervous leaf.
love this tiny poem ... life, nature.
Excellent.
Your words are constantly so delicious ... you have a great knowledge of words.
thank you for sharing.
Have a wonderful weekend!
:o)
superb !!!!!
good morning guatami... this was excellent,, and sadly so true... we humans seem to have no respect for anything,,, and yet continue to demand if for ourselves... what a vicious cirle
Great one, Gautami. Well-done!
I like the movement in this poem--we kill what we love and in turn kill ourselves.
This poem reminds me of one of my greatest faults -- destroying things before I realize the good they were doing. Thank you for sharing.
It's called progress my dear. We can't have all these "plants" around thinking this is THEIR world or anything...
Great stuff.
Anyhow, remember how a short time back you tagged me? Well I am here to tag you back. Its kinda the same thing but a little differant.
Take a gander...
You were certainly inspired by this moment because it's full of promise and hope. Excellent!
I always admire your work!
There are not enough adjectives to describe how good you are!
The final lines were so indicative of where we are - great job - lovely images and pure words.
brilliant poignant & thought provoking...
love
"understandings the
purpose of its life,
shoot blossoms to tree
perpetuating the world"
and ofcourse
"we, the civilized ones
axe it down to ground"
Gorgeous, as usual! I love it. Most especially the last.
Here from Michele's
I cannot write poetry and I am continually amazed when someone for whom English is a second language (I presume) can write it so well!
Michele sent me.
Mass adulation, brought about by mass media! Can we blame the girls, shouldn't we stop pandering to the media, the promoters! I say we educate people to be better parents ... now that would be a phenomenon!
This is wonderful and it flows so nicely.
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