ink bled from that pen
smudging the paper
skillfully hiding words
which he had written
with much trepidition
for you and only you
oh well, he feels better for it
now that you can't read
all that he wrote for you
those words which split
him apart; now hidden
can mend him somehow
although he is not aware
of it. he is trying to rewrite
it unsuccessfully on a blank
page soaked with his tears
again smugding the paper
"paradoxically in a different way"
35 comments:
Sad and true! sometime it is hard to write what you feel.
I don't always understand poems, but I really found this quite sad, I felt the sadness in the words
Loved this one a lot... well penned...
thankfully, the comments dont get smudged :)
cheers mate...
That is a very cool poem. A great idea and really well made. I love the way it ends with a 'x' kiss.
Enjoyed the contrast of words reveal and hidden, the same as emotions. Very nice!
What an emotional piece. Beautifully written and a joy to read.
not sure what gingaTao means--did the x at the end get smudged? or does he mean the x in paradoxically?
provocative all round
my thoughts . . .
the letters thicken
on the page
Gautami--
Really related to this poem. Thank you for it--
This poem demonstrates paradox well.
Thank you for sharing it.
O the bleeding ink that stains and blurs with tears.
An excellent paradoxical response.
I like the idea of skillful ink that somehow undoes its own work! What an interesting idea. Makes me think the ink has a life of its own somehow.
Beautiful done. I feel this one through and through.
sometimes just the act of writing things out without sharing the words brings such healing & your poem says that to me.
Liked it, but felt the whole point lies here:
"paradoxically in a different way"
wishes!
devika
powerful and emotional... love it
Here is a true feeling of hopelessness expressed. The tear soaked paper is so much more lasting than is the fickle 'delete' key.
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Very, very poignant. I can feel the image you described.
To me this captures the opposite of a difficulty writing what one feels, but rather the fact that we may easily write what cannot share or even should not share.
I like it, there's so much in just something down, even if it can't be read once it is written
Very nice, Gautami. I think I've been there!
Marvellous, Gautami - as always. I like how the narrator felt freed and relieved when no one could actually read what he'd written. Sometimes art is a dialogue only between the writer and himself or herself.
This just pulled at my heart. Sad and profound.
Sad but lovely. Well done!
It is nice :)
Sadly vivid. Paradoxical, indeed!!
"..the bleeding ink that stains and blurs with tears"_
"paradoxically in a different way"_
..many thanks for sharing this..
This is loaded! A story of hope triumphing over helplessness, like a window on a stolen moment in time, a nightmare revisited, perhaps!
Excellent work!
Yes, words can split us apart but the magic is that they can put us back together, too! Wonderfuly written!
Lovely blog.So much to read.Would visit it again.Keep writing.
Very deep and powerful. Thank you for sharing.
Thank you for your visit too. Take care.
OK -- I have no computer skills. For days I've been calling up my shortcut for you and always come to the same post from September 10. "Busy," I think. Sometimes I can't post regularly -- but I know there have been comments. Well, maybe writer's block.
I apologize for not visiting the REAL blog -- apparently, I bookmarked a specific post from WOW. Duh.
This is a lovely poem and it's good to see your work again.
Now looking at it...
i begin to feel...
there's nothing "paradoxical" about anything..It is the way you look at it, no Gautami?
hope you agree and do not remove this, as you did with mine earlier...two three times...
there are people who just read comments too, they say ;-)
wishes!
devika
This was filled with emotion...beautifully sad.
'those words which split
him apart; now hidden
can mend him somehow'
ah the rending power of words!
ah the mending power of words!
this is haunting.
thanx for visiting
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