he, in that oil-stained overall
works around his racing car
with single-minded passion
that defies everything
she sits in the shade with a book-
reading with absorption
when heat gets to him
the overall is off
sweat trickles down
highlighting his tattoos
she steals a glance-
watches the play of muscles
he feels it too-
measures that intensity
through his own flared feeling
teeters up from his work
her book drops, pages dog-ear
with baited breath, she waits for him
isn't it all so ideal-
her tattooed male smells of mobile oil,
sweat, and flared desire
she succumbing to it all
26 comments:
Very passionate today. But will he fix your car?
Steamy! I like the way this builds.
Phew, she is a cheap night out...
...if only it was all so easy, or am I missing out?
<3
Loved it!!
b
http://torristravels.blogspot.com/2010/01/three-word-wednesdaysouth-pacific.html
Ugh... Phew...
I could feel the heat...great read!
goodness, will someone please hand me a fan? ;-)
You had me with the race car, all the way through to the steamy, sexy ending. Very nice!!!
Sexy and can fix a car?
Loved it- very hot.
I apologize for my previous brief comment, which might be taken for rude except that my life was in grave peril at the time and it was all I'd time to utter.
To elaborate: Lady, the smells in thy poem are not universally Cherished. And I would suppose the Churl's breath smelled of barley hops?
May I suggest leaving the Bronx to travel abroad where you would be sure to find Gentlmen more couth - that is, less uncouth - than those in your immediate vicinity.
Cheers,
Percy
Ideal? I'm not sure. But interesting, certainly.
@ Percy
:(, Creativity
Shrinks Your Stature
Simpleton Thoughts
Raise Your Ego
-Shiva
Dark gaze Piercing soul
Rouses dormant desires
Then starts forever
Interesting
Ah, the wonder of it all. Nice!
tell anthony yes I'm sure he'll fix my car, or at least get my motor running LOL.
manic Monday
This is a fun scene and I love how you put it into poetry.
Just proves that beauty really is in the eye of the beholder.
it's all so ideal :D
Uncountable
This piece paints a vivid picture, great description of the scene and the passion as well!
Anon and Uncouth: Do tell Gautami I said "Hi..."
That was a great one..
each one better than the one before; you are amazing
I believe you already have...She speaks very highly of you turns out...
I loved this, very sensual and passionate.
Never Centered
whew - fanning self now. Now I'm wondering, just what was she reading?
That's what I need! A race car! :-) Great read and good use of the 3WW, thanks for sharing it! :-)
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