Tuesday, September 25, 2007

fly in!------Writers Island



fingers itch, face twitches-
wide browed stare
searches moronically
for that fly which escaped.

slowly head turns toward
roof, taking in the walls
too at a glance.
the fly eludes, moving

out of periphery.
with a blink, eyes gather
themselves, collecting-
return to task at hand.

I key in the words
of this observation
for posterity. fly zooms
in to trouble some more.

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Want to be keyed?

32 comments:

tinker said...

You "keyed in" to an interesting take on the prompt! :)

Robin said...

What a unique take on the prompt, very clever.

Steve said...

I always like the way you think.

Marja said...

First of all thank you for visiting me I feel honoured. Your entree is amazing you are very literate. I keep on meeting people from India, I wonder why (I believe there is a reason for everything)

Jo said...

Very, very cool. I am laughing here!

Rose Dewy Knickers said...

I wonder how many opuses have been lost due to the lack of a flyswatter.

Rose

xo

lissa said...

what a fun read!

thanks for visiting my blog.

Ghost Particle said...

hi! interesting as always. and funny.

Ther said...

oh what a big trouble that fly is. good take on the prompt gautami. =)

Lea said...

Somehow as I read your words... I heard a buzz over my shoulder... wonderful view of your inspiration of the key. Thank you!

Rambler said...

out of periphery.
with a blink, eyes gather
themselves, collecting-
return to task at hand.

very nicely done...

desert rat said...

Funny how one can be so easily distracted, indeed nearly driven mad, by one little bug. Original take, making the word a verb instead of the more obvious object.

paris parfait said...

Such an unexpected take on the prompt! Well done, Guatami!

Beloved Dreamer said...

Guatami. what an interesting take on The Key. I love it. OH, BTW- when you are done, can you come over and swat my millers(that's moths in mid-western slang.) Can't help it as it is rooted deep in my mind. Lovely and clever poem.

love-Melanie-bd

polona said...

your fly sounds peskier than mine.
enoyed :)

Mary Timme said...

Oh, my, I'm glad you were clear on what was happening. I wouldn't have guessed otherwise.

tumblewords said...

Original, clever and cute! Interesting use of the prompt!

floots said...

inspiration has six legs :)
nice one

Becca said...

You are so clever :)

I could definitely feel the frustration with that fly!

SlyGly said...

I love it! You captured the universal annoyance perfectly. I'll be revisting your blog for sure.

odessa said...

"fingers itch, face twitches" - i can definitely relate to this feeling when i try to catch a fly. great job on the prompt, as always! =)

keith hillman said...

You used the prompt so cleverly! Another great piece. Your site is an inspiration. Thanks also for your kind words on my contribution

kimberley-s@wildmail.com said...

Good prompt interpretation - :)

For me it is usually my cat trying to sit on the keyboard!

Marie said...

Hello beautiful! Still clever as ever...I always enjoy your take on things. You get me thinking! Keep up the good stuff and thanks for visiting.

MissMeliss said...

I love that you came at this prompt from such a fresh angle.

Also, I sort of like this Writer's Island concept. I might have to play next week.

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

Great collection of words! You're so good at this.

sister AE said...

nice take on "the key." i have gnats instead (sigh).

Fenny said...

Great ... captures everyman's feeling of annoyance when bugged by a fly ... interesting take on the prompt also

Clare said...

Hi Gautami! Wonderful humor in this! I love how the "fly eludes" and the way the "eyes gather themselves". Brilliant!!
:)

Marcia (MeeAugraphie) said...

An identifiable frustration keyed. Got a kick out of it. Flies annoy me more than they should.

Herb Urban said...

I love how you can take such a mundane fleeting moment and create something so poetic and lasting from it.

Jo(sie) said...

I believe I can "fly"....!

Good one,

Jo(sie)