fingers itch, face twitches-
wide browed stare
searches moronically
for that fly which escaped.
slowly head turns toward
roof, taking in the walls
too at a glance.
the fly eludes, moving
out of periphery.
with a blink, eyes gather
themselves, collecting-
return to task at hand.
I key in the words
of this observation
for posterity. fly zooms
in to trouble some more.
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Want to be keyed?
32 comments:
You "keyed in" to an interesting take on the prompt! :)
What a unique take on the prompt, very clever.
I always like the way you think.
First of all thank you for visiting me I feel honoured. Your entree is amazing you are very literate. I keep on meeting people from India, I wonder why (I believe there is a reason for everything)
Very, very cool. I am laughing here!
I wonder how many opuses have been lost due to the lack of a flyswatter.
Rose
xo
what a fun read!
thanks for visiting my blog.
hi! interesting as always. and funny.
oh what a big trouble that fly is. good take on the prompt gautami. =)
Somehow as I read your words... I heard a buzz over my shoulder... wonderful view of your inspiration of the key. Thank you!
out of periphery.
with a blink, eyes gather
themselves, collecting-
return to task at hand.
very nicely done...
Funny how one can be so easily distracted, indeed nearly driven mad, by one little bug. Original take, making the word a verb instead of the more obvious object.
Such an unexpected take on the prompt! Well done, Guatami!
Guatami. what an interesting take on The Key. I love it. OH, BTW- when you are done, can you come over and swat my millers(that's moths in mid-western slang.) Can't help it as it is rooted deep in my mind. Lovely and clever poem.
love-Melanie-bd
your fly sounds peskier than mine.
enoyed :)
Oh, my, I'm glad you were clear on what was happening. I wouldn't have guessed otherwise.
Original, clever and cute! Interesting use of the prompt!
inspiration has six legs :)
nice one
You are so clever :)
I could definitely feel the frustration with that fly!
I love it! You captured the universal annoyance perfectly. I'll be revisting your blog for sure.
"fingers itch, face twitches" - i can definitely relate to this feeling when i try to catch a fly. great job on the prompt, as always! =)
You used the prompt so cleverly! Another great piece. Your site is an inspiration. Thanks also for your kind words on my contribution
Good prompt interpretation - :)
For me it is usually my cat trying to sit on the keyboard!
Hello beautiful! Still clever as ever...I always enjoy your take on things. You get me thinking! Keep up the good stuff and thanks for visiting.
I love that you came at this prompt from such a fresh angle.
Also, I sort of like this Writer's Island concept. I might have to play next week.
Great collection of words! You're so good at this.
nice take on "the key." i have gnats instead (sigh).
Great ... captures everyman's feeling of annoyance when bugged by a fly ... interesting take on the prompt also
Hi Gautami! Wonderful humor in this! I love how the "fly eludes" and the way the "eyes gather themselves". Brilliant!!
:)
An identifiable frustration keyed. Got a kick out of it. Flies annoy me more than they should.
I love how you can take such a mundane fleeting moment and create something so poetic and lasting from it.
I believe I can "fly"....!
Good one,
Jo(sie)
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