Monday, February 18, 2008

an ode for convoluted crevices


deep crevices
absorb sound, churning it for the brain

convoluted shells weigh reverberating words
lobes soft

bitingly so

pierced, decorated with love.

you deserve stars

I settle for second best-
I let you sparkle with diamonds
set in matt finished platinum.
my closest confidants
of my lover's naughty whispers,
I write this ode for you,
my much treasured ears.

Come ride the Poetry Train...

31 comments:

Keshi said...

wow very nice Gautami!

keshi.

floots said...

nice one
i like this
cheers for ears :)

Rhian said...

Clapping! This is wonderfully fun Gautami! Thanks for starting my day off with a grin!

Whitesnake said...

you are NEVER second best

Brian said...

Sensual and witty. :)

M as in Mint said...

Wow!! I am all ears (& eyes) for more! The title again....ah!! :)And i see someone has seen sensuality too..Ahem! Ahem! (matte platinum finish 'over' the soft lobes, perhaps? what say? LOL! );) :)

Rose Dewy Knickers said...

(((((Gautami))))

Thanks. :) I'd like someday to be able to meet you and we can talk our ears off. ;)

I'll be flitting around this week.

Rose

xo

totomai said...

cheers for the ears indeed. loved the use of reverberating in this ode. thanks for the read :-)

julia said...

'my closest confidants
of my lover's naughty whispers'

LOVE that!

Dave said...

The ending is very simple and effective here. I like that "treasured" is both figurative and literal.

Anu said...

very interesting thought Gautami! love your poems

anthonynorth said...

'ear, 'ear - as they say.
Excellent.

R.G. ALEXANDER said...

I love this!

Christine said...

gautami, this is really wonderful. You make the ear even more beautiful than ever.

Ann said...

That was fun! :)

Jill said...

It is weird, that they don't wrinkle as much as the rest of the face... And they are responsable for so much good things!!

paisley said...

guatami,, this was so lovely... you know i never even thought about how much i do appreciate my sense of hearing... what a wonderful reminder.....

Linda Jacobs said...

This reminded me of the ghost in Hamlet saying, "and poured the distillment in the porches of mine ears." Your poem truly honors ears!

Nick Mathews said...

enjoyed the ending...thhnx 4 bringin a simle on the face...
nice topic u chose.. :)
liked it

Lisa Andel said...

Oh, how very interesting.
Then it would be. :)

Homo Escapeons said...

Thanks for the nibble.

polona said...

clever and well written!

lissa said...

ears never sound so alluring!

missalister said...

Your way of expression is extraordinary. Yet I've bookmarked you in the ordinary way... :-)

SweetTalkingGuy said...

Very cleverly done! A reference on every line... I hear you!

chicklegirl said...

I loved that it was so playful and yet also gave me goosebumps!

...deb said...

Oh so good all the way around. Of course you "did it right"! You "did it" wonderfully.

fox said...

I adore the line "you deserve stars."

This is a delightfully playful and sensual poem.

sister AE said...

How beautiful! I guess I like my ears too, but I hadn't thought of them when I was trying to find a body part to write about.

Birdsword said...

I like this poem -especially how nicely it flowed. I liked how I could "taste" the lobe while reading.

Allyson said...

You definitely did it right! Fantastic!