Poetry for me is a way of living, it comes out of nowhere and I have to write it down. How I write, what I write, I decide. I am not asking you to be judgemental. I am gifted with the ability to see beyond the obvious.
Thursday, February 21, 2008
submerge
This one is from my archives. I played around a bit, changing a word or two.
in the stillness of night if you persist in being that close to me-
I will have to find a way to plunge myself into your luminous soul.
27 comments:
Anonymous
said...
Oh my gosh, Gautami! So simple, and yet so deep and powerful too. I'm in awe.
Very clever thought turn around in the middle, from cautious to actively engaged which is reflected in the structure of the poem. There is something enticing and smilingly tricky and sexy in it.
The essence of that feeling we often find so difficult to express. Some of us are less sincere and find it easy to deceive with flattery. Love the sentiment; not sure how it would sound coming from me.
27 comments:
Oh my gosh, Gautami! So simple, and yet so deep and powerful too. I'm in awe.
I like it ... full of depth :o)
deep
WOW.
So very deep!
Wonderful poem!
It was a lovely surprise having you visit me today!
Thanks, Gautami for the kind comment!
Margie
for some reason it makes me feel like being in love with a ghost or an angel... very beautiful...
I like this! Thank you for these words, Gautami.
Very clever thought turn around in the middle, from cautious to actively engaged which is reflected in the structure of the poem. There is something enticing and smilingly tricky and sexy in it.
Hoo boy - that is hot and sweet and deep. Gorgeous poem, Gautami!
Fair warning Gautami. Very direct.
I really like the last line - I will have to find a way to plunge myself into your luminous soul. Like a love poem.
Love burrows deep in this. Excellent.
Thank You for the head's up...
Forewarned is Forearmed.
That is so good. But then your work always is
short and to the point, excellent
Wow! That's clever and very good!
I like the way both second lines have the same number of syllables. Very haiku-like with it's simplicity!
Wow! luminous soul!
How cool's that?
yes luminous soul is lovely, this is very good, Gautami
It sounds very devious.
Plunge into my soul, if you can find it.
I can't believe I still haven't added you to my blogroll. Damn it Gautami, I will now.
I like the ambiguity in the first stanza, it leaves plenty of room to think about. Good job.
i really enjoy reading your stuff..
always a twist in them..
thanks for sharing this one..
very nice, very powerful for such brevity.
Very powerful. I agree with the others that it packs quite a punch for a short poem.
Wonderful. Treads with poise on a sensitive line between feeling and some irony.
The essence of that feeling we often find so difficult to express.
Some of us are less sincere and find it easy to deceive with flattery.
Love the sentiment; not sure how it would sound coming from me.
love this.
Post a Comment