absorb sound, churning it for the brain
convoluted shells weigh reverberating words
lobes soft
bitingly so
pierced, decorated with love.
you deserve stars
I settle for second best-
I let you sparkle with diamonds
set in matt finished platinum.
my closest confidants
of my lover's naughty whispers,
I write this ode for you,
my much treasured ears.
Come ride the Poetry Train...
31 comments:
wow very nice Gautami!
keshi.
nice one
i like this
cheers for ears :)
Clapping! This is wonderfully fun Gautami! Thanks for starting my day off with a grin!
you are NEVER second best
Sensual and witty. :)
Wow!! I am all ears (& eyes) for more! The title again....ah!! :)And i see someone has seen sensuality too..Ahem! Ahem! (matte platinum finish 'over' the soft lobes, perhaps? what say? LOL! );) :)
(((((Gautami))))
Thanks. :) I'd like someday to be able to meet you and we can talk our ears off. ;)
I'll be flitting around this week.
Rose
xo
cheers for the ears indeed. loved the use of reverberating in this ode. thanks for the read :-)
'my closest confidants
of my lover's naughty whispers'
LOVE that!
The ending is very simple and effective here. I like that "treasured" is both figurative and literal.
very interesting thought Gautami! love your poems
'ear, 'ear - as they say.
Excellent.
I love this!
gautami, this is really wonderful. You make the ear even more beautiful than ever.
That was fun! :)
It is weird, that they don't wrinkle as much as the rest of the face... And they are responsable for so much good things!!
guatami,, this was so lovely... you know i never even thought about how much i do appreciate my sense of hearing... what a wonderful reminder.....
This reminded me of the ghost in Hamlet saying, "and poured the distillment in the porches of mine ears." Your poem truly honors ears!
enjoyed the ending...thhnx 4 bringin a simle on the face...
nice topic u chose.. :)
liked it
Oh, how very interesting.
Then it would be. :)
Thanks for the nibble.
clever and well written!
ears never sound so alluring!
Your way of expression is extraordinary. Yet I've bookmarked you in the ordinary way... :-)
Very cleverly done! A reference on every line... I hear you!
I loved that it was so playful and yet also gave me goosebumps!
Oh so good all the way around. Of course you "did it right"! You "did it" wonderfully.
I adore the line "you deserve stars."
This is a delightfully playful and sensual poem.
How beautiful! I guess I like my ears too, but I hadn't thought of them when I was trying to find a body part to write about.
I like this poem -especially how nicely it flowed. I liked how I could "taste" the lobe while reading.
You definitely did it right! Fantastic!
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