Wednesday, April 02, 2008

parallel plot

yellowed paper fell from my journal
my eyes scanned through the mysterious markings
did astronomy play a part?
was it about a parallel world
faded out of vision by the familiar one?
writings on the wall had not warned me
I kept speculating about its origin
how did it come about in my pocket book
almost brittle piece of paper with frayed edges
stars and squiggles with lines and curves

"give me that paper, it is mine"
my five-years old niece came to me with a bounce
almost snatching it from my hand!

27 comments:

Brian said...

Made me smile. The vehemence of innocence.

anthonynorth said...

A mystery soon solved :-)

lissa said...

You always surprise me with your endings, great one

Billy said...

Loved the mystery of the first part, with a great smile to round out the piece :)

tumblewords said...

So readily explained! Neat writing!

pia said...

Love the deep thoughts followed by the five year old

pjd said...

Happens every day around here!

Jo Anne O. said...

Love it! Just before the last sentance I had thought it was placed there by yourself who was from another dimension! Great ending!

Lucy said...

mysterious markings in... crayon! Very cute Gautami!

gingatao said...

Cool, great ending, collapsing the mysteries of the universe into the enthusiasm of a child, lovely,

Linda Jacobs said...

Great style here! I could picture that paper and the drawing on it! love your little niece!

Tammy said...

LOL You always catch me with your endings. ;) Delightful Tami!

Noah the Great said...

Hahaha. :D

paisley said...

things that make you go...hmmmmm.....

Jujee said...

Nice lead up to cheery ending

Whitesnake said...

who knows where the cold wind blows?

Am In Trance said...

Aww.. Thats So Cute..!!

TC said...

This was so cute Gautami :)

ozymandiaz said...

another mystery of the universe explained

christine said...

That made me smile at the end. What a bossy young thing! and the imagination of a writer, getting lost in her fancies, until...poof! fun read, gautami.

One More Believer said...

that was very funny!!!...

Amarettogirl said...

How clever, fun, witty and playful this read was! Loved it! thanks!

Laane said...

wonderful!
Aren't kids fun. LOL!

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Marcia (MeeAugraphie) said...

I was so convinced you had written it and forgotten it... until she bounced in. Much fun!

watermaid said...

I always like a surprise ending.

polona said...

you are certainly a master of punch line.
great stuff as always

WriterKat said...

Kids definitely live in a parallel, almost alien universe. Great twist on the plot.