Wednesday, April 02, 2008

parallel plot

yellowed paper fell from my journal
my eyes scanned through the mysterious markings
did astronomy play a part?
was it about a parallel world
faded out of vision by the familiar one?
writings on the wall had not warned me
I kept speculating about its origin
how did it come about in my pocket book
almost brittle piece of paper with frayed edges
stars and squiggles with lines and curves

"give me that paper, it is mine"
my five-years old niece came to me with a bounce
almost snatching it from my hand!

27 comments:

Anonymous said...

Made me smile. The vehemence of innocence.

anthonynorth said...

A mystery soon solved :-)

lissa said...

You always surprise me with your endings, great one

WH said...

Loved the mystery of the first part, with a great smile to round out the piece :)

Tumblewords: said...

So readily explained! Neat writing!

Anonymous said...

Love the deep thoughts followed by the five year old

PJD said...

Happens every day around here!

Jo Anne O. said...

Love it! Just before the last sentance I had thought it was placed there by yourself who was from another dimension! Great ending!

Lucy said...

mysterious markings in... crayon! Very cute Gautami!

Anonymous said...

Cool, great ending, collapsing the mysteries of the universe into the enthusiasm of a child, lovely,

Linda Jacobs said...

Great style here! I could picture that paper and the drawing on it! love your little niece!

Tammy Brierly said...

LOL You always catch me with your endings. ;) Delightful Tami!

Noah the Great said...

Hahaha. :D

paisley said...

things that make you go...hmmmmm.....

Jujee said...

Nice lead up to cheery ending

Whitesnake said...

who knows where the cold wind blows?

Am In Trance said...

Aww.. Thats So Cute..!!

TC said...

This was so cute Gautami :)

ozymandiaz said...

another mystery of the universe explained

Anonymous said...

That made me smile at the end. What a bossy young thing! and the imagination of a writer, getting lost in her fancies, until...poof! fun read, gautami.

Anonymous said...

that was very funny!!!...

Anonymous said...

How clever, fun, witty and playful this read was! Loved it! thanks!

Unknown said...

wonderful!
Aren't kids fun. LOL!

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Anonymous said...

I was so convinced you had written it and forgotten it... until she bounced in. Much fun!

Anonymous said...

I always like a surprise ending.

polona said...

you are certainly a master of punch line.
great stuff as always

WriterKat said...

Kids definitely live in a parallel, almost alien universe. Great twist on the plot.