Friday, May 16, 2008

celebration of sorts----Writers Island



copiously crying women
beat at their chests
instead of heart-rending
it was almost comic

he was somewhat surprised
by so many people at one place
and still there was an eerie hush.
his unknown relatives, friends
he had not seen for what seemed eternity
were present but not interacting
strange sight that it was
he moved to the centre
his eyes were drawn
a pristine white shroud

copiously crying women
beat at their chests.
instead of heart-rending
it was almost comic

on an impulse, he pulled it down
recoiled next moment
as his own face stared up at him.

19 comments:

Brian said...

Sounds like a nightmare my friend. *shivers*

(((((hugs))))

polona said...

that was a bit of a shock!

Whitesnake said...

Sounds familiar!

anthonynorth said...

Chilling.

shubd said...

Such are the ways of the living !!

jadey said...

Goosebumps on my arms from that one. Great post.

Susan Helene Gottfried said...

Very dark, Gautami. I'm not sure what sort of celebration's happening here.

Stan Ski said...

one day it will happen for real - hope it's the life they're celebrating, not the death

vishesh said...

with this(http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3-4J5j74VPw&feature=related) song in the bg...the whole thing gave a movie like effect...:)

b said...

A dream I think...we start awake when we awake and are relieved when we realize that we were only asleep in the sun.

b

Constance said...

'copiously crying' is such a neat turn of phrase. I like the repetition of the stanza, also. Sums it up nicely.

Tammy said...

Freaky to see your own funeral.

HUGS

Jeques said...

Many have been written how a person would find out he is dead after dying ~ this one scene is one of the many.

I like the drama and the details.

But nobody really know how it would be after life.

I wish you well.

~ Jeques

Greyscale Territory said...

This is quite confronting - seeing your cold self - just a shell of life.

A clever write!

gemma

Pri said...

that was eerie!

but u know ive often wondered what itll be like to be at my own funeral :D

Rambler said...

its slightly strange that many of us are thinking about the death today

San said...

oh. eerie!
i love the idea!!

Vasudha said...

a dead man looking at his own corpse... i love this poem. well written.

Gilson said...

I like this, and being that guy, I wouldn't stay in such a place for too long...