deeply staring into your eyes,
I see the irises changing shades
catching my mood into them
your air of detachment
disappears subtly
replaced by fierce heat
with intense interest I watch
our souls merging
where I am not I anymore
you are not you either
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Another of my rare love poetry. I am leaving this open-ended as love in itself is open-ended. Your comments and feedbacks are always welcome.
29 comments:
well, i can almost feel the intensity and the exchanging energies... well done by all means!
ok, i'll post a link to my haiga on one single impression.
thank you for pointing me there :)
Open ended........always!
Ooh!
There is a sense of melting! Quite a beautiful feeling when you love.
Gemma
I think you should write more love poems! this is wonderful! :)
The chemistry of hearts and souls, where two combine to create a new one; love is so much more than physical. I can feel the fusion, the tension and the excitement! Well done!
You are very connected to this person. I like the ending, it has a yin-yang feel to it. Excellent work!
A transformation of identities shared by a common reflection... lovely!
To be transformed by the company of another is a wonderful magic. You captured it so well. Thanks for this!
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I love these lines:
"where I am not I anymore
you are not you either"
Beautiful poem. Very intense. Excellent choice of words. Thanks for sharing this. :)
beautiful lines.. just loved these ones "where I am not I anymore
you are not you either" ... just like they have become strangers and nobody knows if they ever find a way back to each other. Kind of really sad..
Beautiful poem. The passion vibrates in the words. As many others have pointed out, the last two lines are exquisite. Wonderful.
I see the irises changing shades
Love that line and its imagery.
You wove the changing point-of-view seamlessly into this poem. Beautiful
a perfect expression of the two becoming one.
I especially love how you capture the essence of love being a personal journey as well as a dual one - the air of detachment being replaced by fierce heat - thanks for sharing this
The beauty in your thought process here is intense. Such as when two soul mates become one. This union is indeed rare. Spectacular!
This was lovely Gautami. Beautiful and evocative work. Thanks for sharing. Great prompt suggestion too. G
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"I see the irises changing shades
catching my mood into them"
Lovely image.
I love this as much as the original posted on One Single Impression.
Beautiful poem...so lovely when two souls meld into one...eyes meet, hearts collide...love goes beyond the physical...
:)
ehemmm.....love.
Another poem expressing deep feelings-so nice.
i really liked it G... especially noting the open end of it all...
so passionate. it carries me to my own dreams
Merging and melting together. Such ageless passion.
This is timeless and passionate. Much appreciated here! Thank you.
..those who love surely would know about it..thanks for sharing..
It is just gorgeously written. What strong love you reveal.
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