Sunday, May 25, 2008

reflected changes-----One Single Impression



deeply staring into your eyes,
I see the irises changing shades
catching my mood into them
your air of detachment
disappears subtly
replaced by fierce heat

with intense interest I watch
our souls merging
where I am not I anymore
you are not you either

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Another of my rare love poetry. I am leaving this open-ended as love in itself is open-ended. Your comments and feedbacks are always welcome.

29 comments:

polona said...

well, i can almost feel the intensity and the exchanging energies... well done by all means!

ok, i'll post a link to my haiga on one single impression.
thank you for pointing me there :)

Whitesnake said...

Open ended........always!

Noah The Great said...

Ooh!

Greyscale Territory said...

There is a sense of melting! Quite a beautiful feeling when you love.

Gemma

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

I think you should write more love poems! this is wonderful! :)

WillThink4Wine said...

The chemistry of hearts and souls, where two combine to create a new one; love is so much more than physical. I can feel the fusion, the tension and the excitement! Well done!

Edward S Gault said...

You are very connected to this person. I like the ending, it has a yin-yang feel to it. Excellent work!

me ANN my camera said...

A transformation of identities shared by a common reflection... lovely!

SandyCarlson said...

To be transformed by the company of another is a wonderful magic. You captured it so well. Thanks for this!
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Vasudha said...

I love these lines:
"where I am not I anymore
you are not you either"

Beautiful poem. Very intense. Excellent choice of words. Thanks for sharing this. :)

Lena said...

beautiful lines.. just loved these ones "where I am not I anymore
you are not you either" ... just like they have become strangers and nobody knows if they ever find a way back to each other. Kind of really sad..

Raven said...

Beautiful poem. The passion vibrates in the words. As many others have pointed out, the last two lines are exquisite. Wonderful.

writerwoman said...

I see the irises changing shades

Love that line and its imagery.

Pam said...

You wove the changing point-of-view seamlessly into this poem. Beautiful

qualcosa di bello said...

a perfect expression of the two becoming one.

missmays said...

I especially love how you capture the essence of love being a personal journey as well as a dual one - the air of detachment being replaced by fierce heat - thanks for sharing this

MyBellavia said...

The beauty in your thought process here is intense. Such as when two soul mates become one. This union is indeed rare. Spectacular!

Geraldine said...

This was lovely Gautami. Beautiful and evocative work. Thanks for sharing. Great prompt suggestion too. G

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Roswila said...

"I see the irises changing shades
catching my mood into them"

Lovely image.

Patois said...

I love this as much as the original posted on One Single Impression.

dianne said...

Beautiful poem...so lovely when two souls meld into one...eyes meet, hearts collide...love goes beyond the physical...
:)

cyclopseven said...

ehemmm.....love.

gardenpath said...

Another poem expressing deep feelings-so nice.

one more believer said...

i really liked it G... especially noting the open end of it all...

DeLi said...

so passionate. it carries me to my own dreams

Annie said...

Merging and melting together. Such ageless passion.

Quiet Paths said...

This is timeless and passionate. Much appreciated here! Thank you.

zoya gautam said...

..those who love surely would know about it..thanks for sharing..

Teri C said...

It is just gorgeously written. What strong love you reveal.