Wednesday, April 29, 2009

raise the bar

blood in my veins rages
comparable to sounds
a turbulent ocean makes
in the wake of a storm
pulsating to an unheard beat
my skin quarrels with me
warning me of lost opportunity
INSISTING I BE IN YOUR SERVICE

I DON'T THINK I CAN BE SERVILE
opportunity lost warns me
and my quarrelling skin's
beat pulsates in a manner
unheard of. silent storms wake up
turbulence within me
which make oceans tame
compared to the sounds of
raging blood in my veins

"I move away and see your skin pulsating"

27 comments:

ThomG said...

IT certainly doesn't seem forced. Very powerful stuff here.

anthonynorth said...

You're getting more and more powerful.

SweetTalkingGuy said...

Hi Gautami, You've definitely raised the bar here, the very thing that is making the blood in your veins rage, is also the catalyst for some amazing poetry!
-Andy

maglomaniac said...

Whoaaa man,amazing.
Gautami actually pulsating poetry.
Keep raising the bar.

~Harsha

jimmmaaa said...

I like this Gautami.

Serena said...

I love this poem. Its now one of my favorites.

Liz at Yips and Howls said...

I like the pulsing in the poem itself and the image of skin quarreling - all very powerful

Deborah Godin said...

So vivid! I always love the way your images stir things up and stay with me after I click away...

Life without Clots said...

Forced? you all make it flow easy.

Amy said...

Excellent. I could feel the words as I read them.

Tumblewords: said...

Energetic and vivid. Nice!

floreta said...

wow, very masterfully done!! great job!

Wendy said...

Just heard about you losing your blog - I am SO sorry and can completely understand how devastating that must be. Hope Blogger can help retrieve it for you.

Whitesnake said...

tut tut!
I thought you were such a lovabled young woman!

*giggles*

ellie said...

Such a strength in your words.

sarah said...

You are so clever :-)

Wayne Pitchko said...

nicely done..."quarrelling skin's beat" i really like

Kimberly said...

Very nicely done. I really enjoy poems that flow both ways.

blisshappens said...

I liked the repetitiveness of turbulence and ocean. well done, enjoyed it! - meg

Julia Smith said...

Amazing.

Jeeves said...

Your poems are getting more powerful.

Witchmojo said...

Wow, that was dynamite. I wouldn't have known you felt forced when writing it. Love the idea of skin quarreling, superb.

Angel said...

Very powerful and inticing read.

Ann (bunnygirl) said...

Nice imagery here. You're starting to change my view of poetry with all the interesting forms you use.

Lisa Drafall said...

Can't wait to read more.

Lucy said...

very powerful piece Gautami!

Janice Thomson said...

Your work is amazing - it is a treat to read you Guatami.