Thursday, June 11, 2009

dance baby, dance

reflecting resplendently
three tiered gypsy skirt
beckoned to me to yard sale.
a gem amongst the junk
I twirled it in my hands

wrapped it around me
tiny bells tinkled merrily
and I was totally sold
buying it instantly
I retreated jauntily

felt someone pulling at me
begging for the skirt
angrily I turned back
ready refusal on my lips.
no words came out of me

"I gave it away with no second thoughts
at the fag end of her career,
Madonna needed it than I did"

22 comments:

venus66 said...

Very interesting ending.:)

sarah said...

this is such a ... a ... I can't find the word I want. Onomatopoaeic poem. Love it.

RBroeker said...

Would be a great rock-song.

Best wishes
Ralf

Lorraine said...

Woohoo that rocks in so many ways, dancing with the belles and the bellies lol

Irene Toh said...

kinda cute

Phil Thrift said...

Very nice with the Madonna ending!

Raven's Wing Poetry said...

*lol* I could kinda see Madonna and you fighting over the skirt. I could see the scene unfolding as the poem went on. Charming. Good write.

Janice Thomson said...

Love the twist at the end. Perfect.

angie said...

wonderful ending--I can see the whole scene!!

anthonynorth said...

Don't give in to her!! :-)

Paul Oakley said...

I like the irony involved in simply punctuation choice, specifically the quotation marks in your last stanza.

What is that retelling hiding?!

Texas2Tennessee said...

Ditto on the ending...quite clever.

Tumblewords: said...

Clever, clever!!

ying_ko_4 said...

Clever indeed...

With a touch of whimsy.

Linda Jacobs said...

You've got the greatest imagination! What a treat this poem is!

Deb said...

Yes, quite imaginative!

Andy Sewina said...

Madonna needed it (more) than I did! What a great ending!!
<3

chennairamblings said...

Love it
And the skirt tussle with Madonna left me grinning

Kilauea Poetry said...

Oh wow..I liked the no thought- just letting go..this had a hilarious ending too..
Thanks for stopping by-

Erin Davis said...

What an unexpected ending!

Megha said...

Good Imagination!!


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Wayne Pitchko said...

madonna ending....perfect