Once I started, it wrote itself. I did it without any pause, let alone editing.
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angelically moving
like a belly dancer
who convolutes to a tune
she draped herself into him
her ethereal presence
formulated certain
gentle feelings
in that stone heart
inching towards his soul
he jack-knifed
knocking her
lovely form aside
as soon moribund
naked emotions
took over
progressing
quantifying
regressing
into sadness
like a heavy tomb
of umbrella.
a vellum fell from sky
walls demolished
x-axis of their love
intersected at y and z-axis.
"Love has to be three dimensional or may be four"
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Posted for Read Write Poem and Totally Optional prompts
11 comments:
You have a way with weaving words together without thoughts and yet how passionately they fit...You're very daring, way to go Girl ;
Isn't it great when a poem writes itself? Have a great night. Hope your rest is going well.
you are picture within.........
wow! another style for you! nice
Amazing... You're quite a gifted poet! I just loved your poem... one of the best i've ever had the good fortune to go through!
Fantastic, The words move as amazing as that belly dancer's belly.
Fantastic...
Love your alphabetic organization! So linear. Nice contrast to the 3 or 4 dimensions of love that you end with.
another very nice poem that i enjoyed
Outside of a couple of lines that didn't work for me, I really liked this poem. And I love it when they write themself. That tells me they were just waiting for somebody to "listen" for them.
Very cool! I love your creativity!
The way you wrote this is almost like a single braid!
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