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in that deathless night
dark images dance merrily
undead spirits come alive
ghost graves shake
melting into dead air
heat of that night
goes icily cold
I shiver thousand miles away.
"you would have understood me,
had you but waited."
20 comments:
Bugga, winter can cannot be far away!
Brilliant as ever!
Interesting: you change your area into a groovy, dark and gothic one.
Best wishes
Ralf
I think we all dance with ghosts from time to time. And, who doesn't get chills when someone walks over our grave. Great write. Have a nice night.
This is amazing...quite haunting and thrilling at the same time.
I love the words that finish it too.
I'm shocked to read your most recent post....I never thought that could happen. Thanks for the tale of caution. It must be a massive loss, I'm sorry. I can't imagine losing 3 years of work.
Bella
The whole poem is a tight, visual piece of work & I love the last line!
Peace,
JP/deb
Visual Assimilation
Excellent as usual.
Ghostly when ghosts stir..I did not understand the last two lines though, it sort of popped up from nowhere..like a ghostly appearance
I like the quote at the end. Gives a voice to the spirits, for me.
Very visual...it made me shiver! Loved it... :~)
i always adore poetry with darker tones and this one is no exception. loved the visuals it offers
Tight rhythmic writing, lovely imagery
I like that shiver...
kind of mysterious, like someone far away is reaching you beyond the grave
You would have understood me had you just waited -
truly a priceless line - brilliant
It eerily interesting. Gives a glimpse of how it would feel to be in that situation..huh!!
wonderful!
Mine's up at last. I apologise in advance if you find it a bit agressive!
hey gautami,
this was beautiful.
reminded me of something...
beautiful work..
am following the blog now!
Indeed, this tells a 'too late' tale. Nice work.
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