Sunday, June 21, 2009

deathless ghosts


Do hop on aboard the Monday Poetry Train. Great place to hangout. Post your creative links there. What's stopping you?






in that deathless night

dark images dance merrily

undead spirits come alive

ghost graves shake

melting into dead air

heat of that night

goes icily cold

I shiver thousand miles away.

"you would have understood me,
had you but waited."

21 comments:

Missy said...

oh I love the other worldy feel of this one

Whitesnake said...

Bugga, winter can cannot be far away!

keith said...

Brilliant as ever!

RBroeker said...

Interesting: you change your area into a groovy, dark and gothic one.

Best wishes
Ralf

Michelle Johnson said...

I think we all dance with ghosts from time to time. And, who doesn't get chills when someone walks over our grave. Great write. Have a nice night.

bellamocha said...

This is amazing...quite haunting and thrilling at the same time.

I love the words that finish it too.

I'm shocked to read your most recent post....I never thought that could happen. Thanks for the tale of caution. It must be a massive loss, I'm sorry. I can't imagine losing 3 years of work.

Bella

JP/deb said...

The whole poem is a tight, visual piece of work & I love the last line!

Peace,
JP/deb


Visual Assimilation

anthonynorth said...

Excellent as usual.

Irene Toh said...

Ghostly when ghosts stir..I did not understand the last two lines though, it sort of popped up from nowhere..like a ghostly appearance

Julia Smith said...

I like the quote at the end. Gives a voice to the spirits, for me.

Fledgling Poet said...

Very visual...it made me shiver! Loved it... :~)

totomai said...

i always adore poetry with darker tones and this one is no exception. loved the visuals it offers

jabblog said...

Tight rhythmic writing, lovely imagery

murat11 said...

I like that shiver...

lissa said...

kind of mysterious, like someone far away is reaching you beyond the grave

WitchScribe said...

You would have understood me had you just waited -

truly a priceless line - brilliant

cyclopseven said...

It eerily interesting. Gives a glimpse of how it would feel to be in that situation..huh!!

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

wonderful!

keith said...

Mine's up at last. I apologise in advance if you find it a bit agressive!

Leo said...

hey gautami,
this was beautiful.
reminded me of something...

beautiful work..

am following the blog now!

Tumblewords: said...

Indeed, this tells a 'too late' tale. Nice work.