Friday, September 04, 2009

I hold myself to the doorway

I stay in this dreamy cottage
each of its rooms brings surprises
I hold myself to the doorway
rubbing that tarnished key
I find no lock fit its contours

the mirage of you propels me
to walk through that closed door
I know you didn't leave
any trace of your intentions
you wish to remain exiled in that forest

in my palm, that key fills a void
I romance it, skillfully manipulating it

39 comments:

anthonynorth said...

That's an important key.

sarah haliwell said...

I like this, especially the ending - although I shouldn't really say that, it all flows together so well.

Granny Smith said...

"I find no lock to fit its contours". This is skillfully written and emotionally vibrant poetry.

swapnap said...

Dreamy cottage...each room... full of surprises....well thats a wonderful image!

Americanising Desi said...

the last two lines.. magnificent!
wonderful!

murat11 said...

GT: Your title and this are gems:

the mirage of you propels me...

Best to you.

Old Grizz said...

haunting, reads like a melody

sage said...

Beautiful images, but why did I think about the Bluebeard tales when reading about a key and doors?

UWGB-BEEK said...

I love the line "I romance it." It is a great way to end it. Well done!

Weronika Janczuk said...

I love this. Thank you for sharing!

Jeeves said...

Last two lines are very good

Cynthia Short said...

I really enjoyed this..my feeling was there was no cottage, you were talking about places in your mind - and memories. The key symbolizes things in your memory you want to keep hidden...?

Saoirse Redgrave said...

Very well done. I love the imagery!

~Saoirse

Jim said...

The key fills the role of a Teddy Bear for him. Similar to the child's during a crisis to bring stabilization I'm thinking.
Or a pacifier.
..

spacedlaw said...

Romance as a mystery place. You could unlock anything...

Greyscale Territory said...

Intense, controlled emotion here! And there is quite a hidden agenda to romancing the key! Beautiful!

Geraldine said...

I love the subtle flow of each line to the next. Nice work with the prompt Gautami, I enjoyed reading this work.

Leo said...

a very important key indeed! :)

linda may said...

Haunting poem, held by a memory, beautifully done.

Loch Rob said...

Life is full of many rooms we can open. Often times it only takes a key to open that door and create a new possibility. Great imagery, nicely done.

Maggie said...

I love your key to romance.

SandyCarlson said...

Ah, but how to enter, and when will the beloved return! Such questions make me think of the early days of intense romance. Beautifully done.

Dee Martin said...

Loved this and the title - speaks of hesitation, anticipation, and a host of other "ations"

Vita Stunder said...

The last two lines are brilliant!!

Sweetest in the Gale said...

There's such a yearning presence in this romantic poem...beautiful!

Tammie Lee said...

wonderful idea of romancing a key that opens the door to ones next step, the continuing of a journey.
Spirithelpers

bethany said...

mesmerizing...

keiths ramblings said...

A truly special key.

Jennifer Hicks said...

This leaves me feeling curious ~ I want to know who you're talking about! Great piece!

Amias said...

Leaves a lot to the imagination ... I need a key like that!

qualcosa di bello said...

i get a sense of hesitancy to cross a threshold in your words...very poignent use of a tangible object for something intangible

Novel Nymph said...

the mirage of you left me suspended in air...what a beautiful piece...

Novel

Kuyerjudd said...

Beautifully written, emotional, sweet.

Tumblewords: said...

A lovely romantic piece - mysterious, mystical, full of magic and wonder. Nice!

Tammy said...

That is one special key!

gabrielle said...

Stay a while inside the cottage, touching the walls of the rooms. You don't have to leave. the key is your talisman, a warm stone in your palm.
Beautiful, wistful, strong and deep.

Beloved Haiku Dreams said...

As always Tami, this is lovely.My favorite lines are:
"in my palm, that key fills a void
I romance it, skillfully manipulating it" It leaves such a dreamy image in my mind.
Well done.

love-Melanie-bhd

DeLi said...

haunting

Patti said...

"I stay in this dreamy cottage
each of its rooms brings surprises"- I loved those lines and I want to be in THAT cottage! Beautifully haunting and ah- yes, those keys- some fit, some don't and some do need manipulating, don't they...