scissor fell on my toe
cutting it into two
I watched part of it walk away
and what remained with me
jigged in glee-.
it had hated that toe.
being toeless was one great state
I saved on the nail polish
although my right foot looked ghoulish
with a hammer and chisel
I matched the left to its pair
it was fate that the two toes got on a date
I am left with best feet in town
no, no, please don't look down!
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Hilarious and quirky.
Loved the humour here - almost Kingesque.
I don't know what stimulant you are taking at the moment but it's working well and I'd like some too!
Love this piece. Iam looking at my toes now
A funny piece of toe humor here! Thanks.
Hi Gautami,
I'm glad this finished on a fun note; I was squirming from the hammer and chisel!
from Therese B. at RWP -- This poem adds another dimension to the sidebar statement on your blog: "While you are here, don't forget to leave your footprints." Feet as a powerful metaphor for who we are, how we stand and tread, upright as human beings, on the earth.
Very darkly humorous, and a bit icky, but a fun read! Thinking of the amputated toes "hooking up". HA
Great!
Love it! Another side of the wonderful poetess Guatami...
Clever! A bit ghoulish, in a cute way. This was fun.
mmm Moses knowes that his toeses aren't roses but moses supposes amiss...
Ouch that was kind of dark humour.. Very abstract though could be interpreted in many ways.. Beautifuly penned..
You got to wonder what they talked about on the date
I like the humor and the playful approach you take to this. I could visualize the cartoon like effects quite vividly.
Gruesome and funny -- a great combination!
Worthy of the Brothers Grimm themselves!
I am thinking about the women in China with their bound and mutilated feet, to create daintiness. So, while your poem is funny, it has this sad connection.
I liked the rather glib attitude you managed to create.
Thank you for sculpting this tale, Gautami.
this brought a smile to my face...
I smiled through the pain of reading about severed toes... very nicely done. I loved the tone of this.
saving on nail polish probably overshadows the pain required to reach that point. Good toe tale.
Incredibly inventive, and a surprising pleasure to read (I giggled, too). Thank you!
I agree that this is remarkably inventive. There's a lot of humor but as others have pointed out, there's something sad lurking around the edges.
A bit of dark and twisted humor that I enjoyed reading (although I think I'll be keeping an eye on my toes tonight).
-Nicole
Thanks so much for leaving the link! This was wickedly fun - I could see Tim Burton making a short film of this - v. vivid!
gautami thanks for the chuckle this afternoon! the voice in this poem is fun and witty. that lat couplet a surprise, i was thinking this might travel in the direction of jealousy and possibly rage. enjoyed!
-lawrence
Wow, that was an unexpected surprise. Made me smile and chuckle :)
It sounds a bit psychedelic, but with a smiling eye.
Best wishes
Ralf
quirky toes are sweeet....thanks for sharing
Ouch, but bemusing too! You just can't turn away! It's all been well said, but I'll add my name, my appreciation here. Maybe you can give us another ghoulish treat when our October Halloween arrives!
wow. the close of the first stanza is impeccably truthful! Wow, truth being collaged into a poetry about whopper lies. Gotta love it! :-)
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