I stay in this dreamy cottage
each of its rooms brings surprises
I hold myself to the doorway
rubbing that tarnished key
I find no lock fit its contours
the mirage of you propels me
to walk through that closed door
I know you didn't leave
any trace of your intentions
you wish to remain exiled in that forest
in my palm, that key fills a void
I romance it, skillfully manipulating it
39 comments:
That's an important key.
I like this, especially the ending - although I shouldn't really say that, it all flows together so well.
"I find no lock to fit its contours". This is skillfully written and emotionally vibrant poetry.
Dreamy cottage...each room... full of surprises....well thats a wonderful image!
the last two lines.. magnificent!
wonderful!
GT: Your title and this are gems:
the mirage of you propels me...
Best to you.
haunting, reads like a melody
Beautiful images, but why did I think about the Bluebeard tales when reading about a key and doors?
I love the line "I romance it." It is a great way to end it. Well done!
I love this. Thank you for sharing!
Last two lines are very good
I really enjoyed this..my feeling was there was no cottage, you were talking about places in your mind - and memories. The key symbolizes things in your memory you want to keep hidden...?
Very well done. I love the imagery!
~Saoirse
The key fills the role of a Teddy Bear for him. Similar to the child's during a crisis to bring stabilization I'm thinking.
Or a pacifier.
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Romance as a mystery place. You could unlock anything...
Intense, controlled emotion here! And there is quite a hidden agenda to romancing the key! Beautiful!
I love the subtle flow of each line to the next. Nice work with the prompt Gautami, I enjoyed reading this work.
a very important key indeed! :)
Haunting poem, held by a memory, beautifully done.
Life is full of many rooms we can open. Often times it only takes a key to open that door and create a new possibility. Great imagery, nicely done.
I love your key to romance.
Ah, but how to enter, and when will the beloved return! Such questions make me think of the early days of intense romance. Beautifully done.
Loved this and the title - speaks of hesitation, anticipation, and a host of other "ations"
The last two lines are brilliant!!
There's such a yearning presence in this romantic poem...beautiful!
wonderful idea of romancing a key that opens the door to ones next step, the continuing of a journey.
Spirithelpers
mesmerizing...
A truly special key.
This leaves me feeling curious ~ I want to know who you're talking about! Great piece!
Leaves a lot to the imagination ... I need a key like that!
i get a sense of hesitancy to cross a threshold in your words...very poignent use of a tangible object for something intangible
the mirage of you left me suspended in air...what a beautiful piece...
Novel
Beautifully written, emotional, sweet.
A lovely romantic piece - mysterious, mystical, full of magic and wonder. Nice!
That is one special key!
Stay a while inside the cottage, touching the walls of the rooms. You don't have to leave. the key is your talisman, a warm stone in your palm.
Beautiful, wistful, strong and deep.
As always Tami, this is lovely.My favorite lines are:
"in my palm, that key fills a void
I romance it, skillfully manipulating it" It leaves such a dreamy image in my mind.
Well done.
love-Melanie-bhd
haunting
"I stay in this dreamy cottage
each of its rooms brings surprises"- I loved those lines and I want to be in THAT cottage! Beautifully haunting and ah- yes, those keys- some fit, some don't and some do need manipulating, don't they...
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